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@Tilly-Yes, Seoul's in South Korea. In the story, Yuka transfers to Seoul then to Japan. I did that as well in my travels. @Red-That's a good start to your story. And welcome to Writers Club. 'Ahem' Back to the story. While in the plane, the air hostess gave her the headphones. Now she can listen to music while she reads. She folded a bit of the book page and put it on her lap. Then she opened the headphone packaging, slot it in the headphone hole, then listened to the radio. But instead of listening to English music, she is listening to Japanese music. Yuka has no idea what they're singing since everything is in Japanese. However, she knows that she's going to start learning Japanese when she arrives to Fukuoka. In front of her, there's instructions booklet on the screen and controller. She read it carefully and started to play for a while. After 10 minutes, she got the English music that she wanted to listen. 'Phew! I never thought it takes long to get the English music' Yuka thought to herself.  |
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Thanks for the comments guys, and.. uhh, reading my work. x3 @Mokona: Lol, it's a little too perfect for my usual though. I just ended up pushing the grammer in this story to the extreme this time. My usual work is a little more lazed. xD @Red: I've read through your story so far. Grammer aside, I'd like to see a little more. =3 Don't have too much time to help out with the translation grammer and such. The only part I was a little confused about was the last line about the struck by lightning stuff. o.O Btw, here's the next part of my story. Enjoy. Part Three Another day begins with another morning. It felt the same as every other day. The incident on the previous day instantly invaded my mind. I wouldn’t expect anything different, since forgetting is far from possible. Although shocking, after seeing that horrific article, nothing really seemed to change. Due to the higher level of vocabulary and long paragraphs of writing which contained continuous lines of lifeless text, Emili was easily driving into confusion and remained clueless. Natali, who had probably figured it out when her parents never came back home that day, showed absolutely no reaction to it, as expected, and continued sitting by the window like every other day. Ramy was no different. Although being the only one of the three that had read the article and recognized their parents in the photos, she had very little of a reaction. It wasn’t even long after she saw it until she went back to her typing. Today the three were once again in my room. There was no change in their placement or activities. Ramy had pushed me off my mattress again while I was sleeping. She was busy typing on her laptop as usual. Natali was in her spot yet again. She stared out through the window just like she did every other day in the past. Her hair was tied up high towards the right side of her head. Emili was lying on the ground not far from where I was. She stared up at the ceiling waving her hands in the air. My best guess was that she was probably making shapes out of the ceiling plaster. Even though everything looked the same, the atmosphere felt completely different. It was probably just my subconscious desire to see some kind of change after yesterday tormenting me. “I’m hungry.†Emili complained. She had rolled over on her side so that she now faced towards me. I heard a tiny growl coming from her direction. Come to think of it, she did not have much to eat since yesterday. The girls’ parents would usually return some time at night to prepare food they brought back with them. Knowing how life works, it was highly unlikely for them to return that night. Instead of dying due to starvation, I salvaged whatever I could find for the four of us. We ended up feasting on a delectable dinner of sandwiches containing peanut butter and grape jelly. To anybody else, this would be far below the level of an unsatisfactory meal, but we did not have much of a choice, since the only source of money and food in the household was gone. “Want me to get you something to eat, Emili?†I asked her while still rolled up in my blanket. To be honest, I was quite hungry myself. Usually I would wake up simply feeling tired, but today, I woke up feeling like there was some kind of black hole inside my body that was pulling my insides together in addition to being tired. “Can you make more of that pita… peanut butter jelly?†Emili asked me, fumbling halfway into her question. I felt relieved that she did not ask for something different. I was not sure if there was much of anything else left in the house that I knew how to prepare. I remembered that there were a few slabs of some kind of meat in the freezer, but I was not confident enough with my cooking skills to try. Even if I was, it would probably be better to save the meat for a time when we would really need it. Once I found my way out of my blanket, I sat up. “Do either of you want one too?†I asked while looking in the general direction of the two older girls. Neither of them responded. It was probably best if I made one extra sandwich. I slowly got up and left the room. Once I had made my way into the kitchen, I took the package of sliced bread out of the freezer, as well as the jar of jelly from the refrigerator and the jar of peanut butter from the cabinet next to it. I searched the cabinets for one of the few plates left in the house. Most of it was sold in order to obtain a little more cash. Once I found one, I began making the sandwiches. I threw two slices of bread into a toaster for myself and took four out for Emili’s sandwich and the extra. Thank God things are well enough that the city still has an available power source. I left the toaster to do its job while I prepared the other two sandwiches. I took out a metal butter knife and spread the peanut butter and grape jelly on the slices, using just enough so that there would be a reasonable amount of peanut butter and jelly for the future. Once the sandwiches were ready, I brought them up to my room on a single plate. “Emili. Your sandwich is done.†I called out to her even though she was practically in front of me when I entered. She grabbed one of the sandwiches and immediately started feeding on it. It was nice watching her enjoy her sandwich. It took my mind away from the entire situation the world was in. I felt clam seeing her so happy. “Does anybody else want one?†I asked for the second time. Neither of them responded. Ramy was ignoring me and typing away on her laptop. I assume she didn’t want one. I walked across the room towards the window where Natali sat. “Want one?†I offered. She turned and looked at me. Although I had seen her face many times before, the lack of emotion it possessed would always send chills through my body. It was mostly due to the suspense. Every time she turned to see what we were up to, I would always wonder if that was the day she would finally say something. Never once had it happened, but that does nothing but add to the suspense. “If you want one, you can just take it.†I told her. There was, again, no response. It would sometimes feel like I was talking to nobody. To my surprise, Natali reached out and grabbed one of the sandwiches. She turned back towards the window, pulled the sandwich close to her face and began eating it, still resting on her other hand. Her cheeks had a soft pink glow to them as she chewed. She seemed happy. She was probably quite hungry. I left her alone to enjoy her food and sat down near Emili and prepared myself for my own sandwich. Just as I sat down, Ramy stopped typing. She put her laptop down and crawled across my mattress. Before I could figure out what she was doing, she grabbed the last sandwich, which was the one I had especially made for myself. “Why didn’t you say something if you were hungry, Ramy?†I asked. She continued to ignore me and returned to her laptop. My stomach grieved as she bit into my sandwich. IT was only moments later that she placed the sandwich back onto the plate. Only half of it remained. The part where she had bitten looked almost like it was cut off with a knife. “I’m full.†She explained to me. It was obvious that she could not have gotten full over half of a sandwich as disappointing as this one. Selfish as it may seem, my stomach was far too hungry to worry about her. Without another second wasted, I grabbed the remainder of the sandwich and engulfed it. I cared too much about satisfying my hunger to savour it. Within a few minutes, everybody else had finished eating. The day continued on as usual. Everybody was busy doing their own thing. I ended up resting flat on my back for most of the day, only getting up once to make some macaroni and cheese for everyone at night around the time we would usually eat. After the meal, the girls left my room early and returned to their own. As I lay in my bed, my eyes gradually closed shut. I began to drift slowly into my sleep. The night continued on peacefully. That was until I suddenly woke up. It was difficult to figure out what had caused me to wake up, but just before I felt myself snap out of my dreams, I heard a faint, painful scream from an unknown female voice. It took a moment before my eyes were willing to open. My body jumped as a deafening slam from the hallway outside echoed through my solid room door. It was most likely one of the other doors in the hall, but what bothered me was that I did not know what caused it. That was more than enough to have me get up just to see what was going on. When I stepped off the mattress and onto the floor, my legs instantly felt as cold as ice. I realized that what I wanted more than finding the cause of the noise was to curl back up into my blanket, so I did. It was only seconds later when another sound came from the hallway. Although quiet, it was easily recognizable. It was the sound of the floor creaking. Someone was in the hallway. I have no other choice but to investigate. There was no way I can sleep with the thought of an unknown person creeping around outside my door anyways. I got out of bed once again, ignoring the cold this time, and quietly stepped towards the door. When I opened it, Ramy was outside. “What are you doing?†I asked. She pointed towards Emili and Natali’s room, and then continued down the hall. I followed her to the room. She opened the door and we both entered. The window was wide open. The dim moonlight entered the room. A powerful wind blew in as well, slamming the door shut. “So that was what I heard.†Ramy whispered. I assumed that she was woken up earlier by the previous slam. Through the near-perfect darkness, I could see Ramy moving around the room. I feel like I had forgotten something. The door must have knocked it out of my head like it probably did with the wood from the door frame when it slammed. I leaned against the wall and thought to myself in the darkness. “They’re gone!†Ramy yelled. I had realized it too. Emili and Natali were not in the room. I looked at the door, and then the window. For some reason my mind wanted to torture me. I could not come up with anything other than someone breaking in and kidnapping them. There’s no way that could have happened, was there? “We have to look for them!†Ramy said in a panic as she was about to leave the room. I stopped her when I heard a sound. It sounded like a voice. It was hard to tell where it came from. I went back out into the hallway. The voice was coming from the girls’ parents’ room further down the hallway. Ramy rushed ahead and ran straight into the room. “Emili!†I heard her shout from outside the room. I joined her inside and sure enough, Emili was there. She was asleep on the oversized bed. I could tell that our intrusion woke her up. That’s when I noticed she was not sleeping in the first place. There were tears flowing down her face. The streams barely glistened in the weak moonlight. “What’s wrong Emili? Where’s Natali?†Ramy questioned her. She seemed terrified. She crawled onto the bed and wiped the tears from Emili’s face. Emili was shaking as she cried. I could tell she was trying hard to make out words, but her tears would constantly interrupt her. “Natali said… She said she’s leaving forever… She said… She’s going to see mommy and daddy…†Emili's whispered words cut deep into my eardrums.  |
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@Toyumi Thanks. Dont bother to point out the gramatical errors in my story, since it will fill one A4 full page （≧▽≦）. Just enjoy the story (*ﾟーﾟ) @Doom Thanks for letting me join this group (^___^) @Anime Ohoho...thanks. Please keep reading my story (^___^) @Komaro Ahaha....thanks a lot. But be patient since a chapter is more than 20 page long (in A4 paper (>__<)) Err...for that part (struck by lightning)...it's actually a saying in my country when you suddenly feel extremely shocked. The original is: 'Bagai disambar petir' = 'feel as if struck by lightning'. I'll fix this later. Okay....here i go for another part! MYSTIC CIRCLE 1st Arc: Girl Possessed by God (part 2) [Yogyakarta, March 14, 2010] Indra walked with languid steps. Rejected in front of other students is not a pleasant event. He was not surprised when he suddenly walked up to the 4th floor school building, then jump. These days it's not surprising that there are students who kill themselves just because they were rejected by the people they liked. Indra course will not do that, because he thinks it is very stupid. In addition, falling from 4th floor will not get him killed. It will only make the hospital personnel passed out, or made him kidnapped and taken to the laboratory for examination. Because surely he will not die and will recover in a short amount of time. But right now Indra did want to jump off a building, or from a high bridge. But because it will make him get into more trouble, he thought it’s better to forget that foolish idea. While continuing sighing and holding tears, he walked down the main school building. Indra school is a private high school which is quite famous in the city of Yogyakarta. The main buildings of Harapan High School is quite magnificent and has 4 levels. The school yard is also spacious and classroom are well equipped with top in line educational facilities. It could be said that Indra school is the most favorite school in his city, because in addition to complete facilities, the students graduation rate is also always 100% every year. Indra was grateful because he could go into such a magnificent school. However, today he feels sorry for having come to school. Understandably enough, he had just rejected. While lamenting the fate, he looked up into the sky. Huh! At TV reality show, I saw people get the girl he adored very easily. But the reality is surely bitter, Indra muttered to himself. He walks while still looking up. Then, he saw something on the roof of the tallest buildings in the school. Precisely at the roof of the school main building. At first he did not really care, but out of curiosity, he uses the ability of his sight that are far better than humans, to see what objects are there on the 4th floor it. Then he froze in place. A girl standing on the edge of the security fence on the top floor. It doesn’t need smart people to guess what she will do. But Indra hope that he was wrong. "Wa .. wait a minute .... she couldn’t try to...." Indra did not successfully complete his words because the girl suddenly stepped and jumped. Yes. The girl has just jumped from the roof of 4 storey building. Without thinking Indra ran as fast as he can. Thanks to his physical ability which far above man, he could run 100 meters in less than 8 seconds. As he kept looking at the body of the girl who falling down, he immediately estimates the position of the fall. If he missed even an inch, the girl surely hit the ground and died. Then, Indra stretch out both of his hands and caught the girl's body. Based on physical laws of free fall motion, the momentum and mass of the girl should be more than enough to break Indra’s hands. But once again, Indra feels thankful that he still have the power of vampire. Thanks to that, he could support the weight of the girl who fell from quite a high with his hands. Although his hands instantly felt tingling and his knees felt a little pain. He totally ignored the sensation because he managed to catch the girl before she hit the ground. In other words, Indra has just saved the lives of the girl. The girl was apparently unconscious. Indra slowly lowered the girl but still support it with his hands. Seeing the girl was unconscious, he was so worried. "Oi! Are you okay? Oi! "Indra said while patting her cheek. But the girl remained unconscious. She seemed shocked as she almost died. Indra become so confused, and did not know what first aid he should give in a situation like this. But suddenly something occurred to Indra. CPR! Artificial respiration ....! Indra cried silently. Indra is not that stupid, but he really did not know what he should do. So he decided to do the first things occurred in his mind. Indra swallowed. Sorry ... it’s not that I took the opportunity... but this is an emergency condition .... Indra muttered to himself as he slowly bring his face toward the girl's face. Then Indra realized that the girl was so pretty. Her skin is white and looks fine. Her long lashes perfectly fit with her shiny-pinkish lips. She has shoulder-length hair, but it fit perfectly with her oval shaped face. Indra fell silent and unable to move. He then closed his eyes. "Oh God .... how can I see this beautiful creature?" He said absently. "What do you think are you doing?" Indra suddenly heard a melodious voice, but in cold and threatening tone. He opened his eyes and saw the girl who lay beneath him. The girl looks at him with a piercing stare. Indra immediately feel embarrassed and answered spontaneously. "Ah ... ehm ... err ... .... this is CPR, artificial respiration?" Wrong answer. The girl immediately swung her hand and hit Indra’s chin. The girl movement is unbelievably fast, and Indra indeed was not ready at all. So, a direct hit was unavoided. With a dramatic movement, Indra falling backwards. His movements will be a quite dramatic when viewed in slow-motion. His body slowly bent backwards, hovering in the air for a split second, before finally crashing to the ground with a bang. Head first. Indra views became blurry and he feels dizzy. He does have the power of vampire, but that does not mean that his power is always active at any time. In addition, the girl blow is pretty hard, as if she is a professional boxer. When Indra’s sight returned to normal within a few seconds later, the girl was standing in front of him threatening manner. "What a pervert! How dare you try to kiss me! "Cried the girl as she wave her fist. "Oi! Wait a minute! You was faint from the shock! "Said Indra while covering his face with one hand, he did not want to be hit anymore. "Anyway why are you trying to commit suicide by jumping from the 4th floor!?" The girl fell silent, she looked toward Indra. Then towards the 4th floor, where she falls just now. Then she looked back at the Indra. This time her eyes filled with tears. "Why am I still alive?" She asked with a trembling voice. The tone of disappointment in his voice makes Indra wonder. "Of course you're alive. I just saved you. Just a little late and your name will appear in local newspaper headlines! "Said Indra as he stand. At first she thought that she would be grateful to him. But her next words directly to make Indra silent. "Why did you save my life? I'm not asking you to do that! " Indra immediately reply to the girl's speech spontaneously. "Are you stupid? A sane person would try to save yourself without being asked! Seeing people die of suicide is not a pleasant sight! "Said Indra with the tone of annoyance. "So what make you commit suicide? Rejected by yout boyfriend? Hah! It's not a good reason to kill yourself!" Indra unconsciously shows his emotions. He had just rejected and it had made emotionally messed up. Plus he's just dealing with a pretty girl who attempted suicide, and seemed disappointed that she had saved. Indra wondered what kind of other bad thing will he meet today? The girl fell silent. Unexpectedly, tears start flowing down her cheek. She tried to stop the tears but she couldn’t. In the end the girl crouched, weeping. Indra immediately feel embarrassed. If there are others who see them, he definitely will be involved in the bizarre rumors and gossip that will be circulated among his friends. And he did not want that to happen. Without thinking, Indra pulled the girl’s hand. "Follow me!" Indra said, carrying her away from open areas. Both of them were walking toward the cafeteria behind the school, which almost empty now. There's only few merchant in the cafeteria which was busy clearing their wares. It’s 4 pm now and all the students have gone home, so the cafeteria is now completely empty. Indra was sitting in front of the girl who was still crying. He did not know what he should do or say. So he waited until the girl felt calmer. About 10 minutes later, the girl finally stopped crying. She seemed calm now. So Indra decided, this is the right time to ask the girl. "So. Why are you trying to commit suicide? "Asked Indra. "Did you know that suicide is nothing but a stupid way to run away from your problem?" "Of course I know! It's just ... I do not know what to do anymore! "Replied the girl, still in a trembling voice. "Then, why don’t you ask for somebody’s help?" Asked Indra again. "Useless! This is not a problem that can be solved easily! "Replied the girl with the higher tone. "Then, tell me what are your problem. I don’t know if I can help you, but it would be better than you continue to keep it for yourself and eventually makes you want to commit suicide, "said Indra with harsh tones as he clapped his hand on the table. Indra is usually is a quiet person and didn’t like to be emotional. But today was different. He now does not hesitate to show that he too was emotional. But he finally realized that if he continues to confront her with emotion, it will not solve the problem. It will even add to the problem. The young man took a deep breath and blow. "Okay. Tell me your problem. At least I can be a good listener, although I'm not sure if I can help you, "said Indra with a softer tone. The girl looked at Indra with pleading look. But that makes it seem prettier than ever. As a normal teenage boy, Indra’s heart suddenly beat faster. "Do you want to listen to my story to end?" Asked the girl. "Of course!" Indra replied without hesitation. "And you will not laugh when you hear my story?" Asked the girl again. "I won’t. I myself just experienced something that would make other people burst out laughing when I told them. So, go ahead and tell me. "Indra replied with a wry tone. She looked thoughtful for a moment and seemed to hesitate. But eventually she ventured to and say what the problem. "I’m bringing bad luck to others." The girl spoke in a low voice, barely audible. Indra, of course, could hear her voice very clearly. But because he didn’t think those words would come out of her mouth, he immediately replied spontaneously. "Huh? What did you say?" "I said I was cursing others with bad luck! Anyone close to me would soon experience a scary bad luck, "she said. "Thanks to that, I was shunned by everyone, including my own family. Everyone was afraid that I'll make them struck by bad luck." Indra fell silent when hear her speech. It’s impossible that a girl as beautiful as she is bring bad luck to others. Besides Indra know that the person called ‘misfortune bringer’ didn’t exist. He remember that Yudha ever saying anything about the person who called ‘misfortune bringer’. But he could not remember what was Yudha said about it. "Ah, it's impossible. People that bring bad luck to others doesn’t exist, "Indra replied. "I knew you would not believe. But it's true. Just today, a friend of mine who invited me to lunch together, experiencing a fracture due to slip during sports lessons, "replied the girl. "Ah. It just an accident, "said Indra. "Then two days ago, a policeman who helped me pick up my shopping that fell, immediately hit by a car and suffered severe wounds." "Uhm. That's .... an accident? " "A week ago, my cousin fell down the stairs and nearly concussed because he help me to solve my homework." "Erm ......." Indra lost for words. He finally admitted that those events are too weird to say as coincidences. "Alright. I trust you ... "said Indra. As he said that, the girl's face suddenly shows relieved expression. He seemed relieved that Indra could trust her words and not laugh or think she was crazy. "I told you. I am cursed. You should not be too close to me, or you might experience a serious accident and get injured," worried the girl. "Don’t sweat it. I will not die that easy, "said Indra with cool tones. "May I ask you something?" She nodded. "Of course! What would you ask? " "Have you ever dealt with a spiritual experience, before the people around you start having bad luck?" said Indra with a serious tone. "Like…let’s see, did you see ghosts, demons, jinn, spirits, or other supernatural beings?" The girl immediately looked at Indra with a strange look at her eyes. Maybe she thought that Indra was crazy. But oddly enough, she then looked down and said reluctantly. "Yes... But you certainly won’t believe in what I said," the girl said with a tone of reluctance. Indra shook his head. "No. I'll believe all the things you say. So, tell me." She looked confused. Perhaps because so far no one considers her story was serious. Every time she starts telling people about her experience, she always regarded as a freak. So when she finally met someone who would believe the story, she was confused. And perhaps, even consider Indra as a freak. But Indra did not care. If the girl problem has some connection with supernatural beings, he can ask for Yudha’s help later. That eccentric person must have a solution to solve this girl’s problem. Despite the apparent hesitation, she finally agreed to tell his experience. "It happened about 1 year ago. At that time I was walking down a row of shops in the area of Malioboro. Then I found a luck- caller cat statue, lying at the side of the road, "said the girl, still with a tone of hesitation. "For some reason, I picked up the statue and then clean it. But I didn’t bring home the statue. I just clean it, set up the statue, then leave. " The girl stopped for a moment and see how Indra reacted to her story. She was surprised because Indra seemed seriously concerned at the story. "So ... what happened after that?" Asked Indra with a serious tone. "Alright. The day after, in the dream I met a white-haired giant fat cat, with black and orange stripe, which brings large gold coins. Just as the form of a cat statue that I found in Mailoboro it, "replied the girl. "The cat seemed to say something, but I can not hear his words. Then I woke up just like that. " Hearing the girl's speech, Indra unconsciously smiled. He was right. He had guessed that the misfortune suffered by the people who were near her, has something to do with supernatural beings. Alright. Then I'll try to contact Yudha later. Maybe he can help this girl, said Indra to himself "After that, strange things begin to happen. I often have good luck. Initially it was fun, but in time it made me feel weird. Because it was weird that I always got strange good luck, "The girl was returned to continue his story. "Then, I experienced severe accident. The bus I ride while going to the beach, overturned and fell into the ravine. Miraculously, I survived with only minor injuries. While almost all other passengers were killed in the accident. The survivors also suffered serious injuries. " The girl was silent for a moment. Tears started welling in her eyes again. The experience was obviously very gruesome and definitely left the trauma to her. She tried to soothe him with a deep breath, and then she returned to continue her story. "That's just the beginning of my problem. Since then, everyone who has ever interacted with me will experience terrible events. As if I was the one who spread the bad luck to everyone around me. To make it worse, now I never have good luck as before, "she said with a trembling voice. "I got to thinking. I might be cursed since I should have died in the accident ...." Indra stood on his feet and said "No!" "It's not a curse because you survived the crash. You survived because it is a miracle. It got nothing to do with your current condition." Indra said it with a steady voice. But her reaction was unexpected by him. The girl also got up and angrily shouted at Indra. "So what?! Why since the accident I was brings bad luck to others! If indeed I should have died in that accident, should I kill my self now, "cried the girl angrily. Tears start flowing down on her cheek. Aaah! I made her cry again…stupid! Indra said to himself. He didn’t mean to make her cry, but the girl emotions were very unstable indeed. "Listen to me. Don’t be so short minded like that. Suicide is not the answer to your problem," said Indra with a softer tone, he tried to calm her. "Then what should I do?!" Replied the girl as she cried out loud. Indra smiled and patted his own chest. "Leave it to me. I know someone who can help you, "Indra said with a confident tone. "If you believe me, I can take you to that person." She looked at her suspiciously looked at Indra. She still couldn’t fully trust Indra, although the young man had saved his life. The girl looked at Indra for a while, but Indra catches a hope in her eyes. "Well ... I do not know what else to do ...." she said with languid tone. "Take me to that person ..." Indra immediately felt relieved. Apparently she can trust his words, though words may not be true, but Indra believes, Yudha must have a solution. As long as he knows and works on Yudha, Indra had never seen him fail in solving the problems associated with the supernatural events. He believes that the girl’s problem would be solved if he took her to Yudha. But then, he realized something. Apparently because of the incident just now, Indra and the girl was not yet acquainted with each other. "Ah. I just realized. I have not even introduced myself, "Indra said, laughing softly. He then pointed to himself. "My name is Indra Pratama, 17 years old. My hobby is playing video games and strolling around the city. Nice to meet you." The girl looked at Indra with a look of amusement. She then wiped tears from her eyes and said softly, but firmly. "I'm Maya Fitria, the girl who brings bad luck to others. Nice to meet you too." The girl then smiled. His smile is so sweet to Indra heart nearly stopped. Gosh! I knew it. This girl is beautiful if she smiled, muttered Indra silently. ________________________________________________ Nyuahaha......i know it's a long part and i know it FULL of grammatical errors. But...meh....enjoy the story. As usual, comments are welcomed. P.S. If someone is willing to points out ALL of the errors, i'll be very happy ヾ(´^ω^)ノ♪   |
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Okay, I finally got the update done. Sorry it took so long, I've been busy with school for these past few weeks and only had time to work on it recently. Anyway, here's the list updated. This only has just what needs to be added, I'm not re-doing the entire list since that would take forever (Well, not literally, but still it would take a lot longer). Updated until I reached this update by Doom: Anime19: Chapter 1: On the Way to Japan (Entire Chapter) Chapter 2: On the Way to Japan (Part 1) Anke: When the Sky Is Not Blue Sleeping Upside Down Darky: Spring Rabbit: Chapter 1 Haseo: Brother Komaro Until Death Do Us Part (Part 1 and 2) Until Death Do Us Part (Part 3) Lacus: Just Melody Nocturne: Part One Red: Mystic Circle: 1st Arc: Girl Poscessed by God (Part 1) Mystic Circle: 1st Arc: Girl Poscessed by God (Part 2) Sayu: Forgotten Schaz: Into the Air (Part 1) Part 1 of a Story Shae: To Forget is Not Easy Reality Tifa: Chapter 1 of a Story Chapter 2 of a Story Chapter 3 of a Story Toyumi: City of Tunnels (Part 1) Riding through the Milky Way Into the Mind (Part 1) Into the Mind (Part 2) Wizard: Pisses Me Off! (Part 1) Pisses Me Off! (Part 2) Pisses Me Off! (Part 3) I PM-ed this to Doom as well, along with a few other things I noticed. I hope I didn't miss anything >.> Also, happy holidays everyone! (Even though it's kind of late for that XD)  |
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Going to get that update into the main page right now. There is going to be some apologies to some people as well. @Tifa: Sorry for not adding your name to the members list as well as your signature. I believe an apology is in order because its been a few months since you posted it. Again i'm sorry. @Haseo: For the same reasons above minus the signature avatar @all: Sorry for not putting enough time into this. I'll try and squeeze in time as i can. @Supporters: Thanks for continuing to read the stories and supporting the people here :D. @Toyumi: Thanks for the list :D ~Doomlight NINJA EDIT: Yay. Everything is updated as of right now. So Front page is updated. Look at the front page to see whats new :3 and thank the people who helped out So Happy New Year
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on 2011-01-02 02:06:32
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Deadly kind of love It's forbidden Yet it's fate It's a love From the darkest Realms of the Earth It's a love With hidden passion From the burning fires of hell It's a love Buried deep within The layers of their hearts It's a love Forbidden to touch- A deadly kind of love… |
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Re: Writers Club/Guild
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on 2011-01-14 05:15:19 |
Hey chocolover! Welcome to the Writer's Club! Love your poem btw- keep up the good work!  |
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on 2011-01-14 07:43:23 |
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Hmmmm. I don't know if chocolover has intent to join to be honest. But welcome to the Writers Club :D The only reason I say this is that since you also posted a poem in the poetry club as well at the same time. ~Doomlight
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on 2011-02-01 20:53:04 |
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@choco: Nice poem there. For some reason the first two lines instantly reminds me of Bakemonogatari. xD No new part from me this time. Haven't really gotten to finishing the next part due to school and time spent out of school being "productive". Haha. Will get to it soon. @Doom: I thought I commented about your front page, but apparently I didn't. The Kanade button made it impossible for me to close the window knowing that she'd disappear. xD I hope it's everything's still sort of living around here. =/ |
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on 2011-02-05 15:11:10 |
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@ Komaro- Don't be surprised if you don't see a lot of posts here for awhile. This club has its active times, and it has times where there won't be a post here for weeks. But that's just how it is. XD I've been working on something for here too. It's not a story, but it's an essay, basically stating my personal opinions on certain moral topics, why I believe in my opinions on those topics and such. I've been busy with school recently, so I don't know when I'll have the time to finish and post it (If I ever do get around to finishing it). That, and recently I've been using more of my free time as reading time rather than writing time. Although there is a topic I'd like to experiment with in a short story sometime, but like with the essay, I don't know when I'll get around to it. |
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on 2011-02-08 14:59:38 |
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^^ I still regularly check back on this thread to read some stories and whatnots. Hope people will post something soon! :P Lol, but a very happy new year (and happy chinese new year) to everyone in this thread and hope everyone has a great writing year lol Xx |
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on 2011-03-10 00:10:34 |
Oh my gosh I'm so dense. I didn't even think of a writer's club forum here. Anyway, I want to join please. I'll probably mostly write stories, maybe a few poems.  |
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on 2011-03-26 09:17:09 (edited 2011-03-27 05:56:12)
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Accepted. Welcome to the writers club ~Doomlight Edit: Heres a short (very) of what I'm writing next. “Evacuation Commencing, All hands prepare for immediate evacuation†announced the PA, “All Civilians Move it†yelled a marine, “Everybody head to the VTOL’s and Board, Marines will hold the line and board the last VTOLs†yelled an Officer. I didn’t really know what to think at the time. My concern at the time was trying to get out of there alive. But even knowing that, there are a lot of people who wanted to make it out of Toronto in one piece. The first VTOL started to lift off from city hall in hopes of making it out alive. The civilians were all pushing and shoving into the VTOLs but they can only hold so much and having to make return trips. But I suppose you’re wondering why there are US Marines here mixed in with the Canadian Army. 24 hours before the incident US Marines were training with Canadian Forces at CFB Trenton but this would turn out that three platoons of marines would only send a squad of 20 soldiers combined of US and Canadian forces to investigate.
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on 2011-04-02 12:24:28 |
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@Toyumi: I see what you mean. Even I almost forgot about this. xD @Tsuna: Welcome to the club. =3 @Doom: Hmm... a military story. Don't see those around often. xD How are your progressing with that? @Tokiro: I really don't know why, but I feel like your story is going to be as mind-destroying as Inception. xD |
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on 2011-04-04 17:27:46 (edited 2011-04-04 17:30:25)
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Accepting Tokiros Application. Welcome :D @Komaro: It's been delayed because of the fact that I have exams at the end of this month. But it will be worked on this month before exams haha. ~Doomlight
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on 2011-04-05 23:06:51 (edited 2011-04-07 00:28:40)
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This story is more or less based on the weird happenings of Gendou chatters... I guess? Anyway, just read. The Chronicles of the Gendou REBORN! Clan – Chapter 1 - 4WayCest Hello, reader. This story is about the many insane happenings of my online clan, and each chapter will have 1 story featuring my clan members. This particular story is about friendship, romance, incest, Sesame Street… Oh wait, I mean weddings. Anyway, just keep reading. Genres: Romance, friendship, incest. Characters: Worm, Jeo, Nurse, A (Anime) and me (Tsuna) Summary: Jeo, A, Tsuna and Nurse were in chat one day, when suddenly the topic of why Worm always fights (ok, debates) with Jeo. The story as follows… One day in Gendou Chat, Jeo, Nurse, Tsuna were just hanging out with each other when suddenly, the topic of why it was that Worm and Jeo always fought (ok, debated) came up. Tsuna piped up “Oh, that’s because Jeo fights with Worm over Nurse!†Jeo’s immediate reaction was to /pwn Tsuna, which earned a shriek from her. “Why’d you do that?!†Jeo replied indignantly “I don’t fight over Nurse, I fight for her.†To which Tsuna replied “You do? But what about all those times you said ‘Nurse is mine!’†Jeo protested loudly (while bashing Tsuna’s brain) and Nurse kept going “O_O!â€. At last, A stepped in; with a loud proclamation that rang in everybody’s ears “I shall marry Nurse!†Cue epic gasp. All hell broke loose. “What?!†Nurse exclaimed. “OMG.†Tsuna announced. “NO WAY!†Jeo screamed. A simply waved aside all protests and stated, “In order to solve this, Nurse needs to marry me. As for Jeo and Worm, they will marry each other.†Dun dun dunnnnnn. “I am NOT going to marry Worm!†Jeo yelled. But it was no use, Jeo was dragged kicking and screaming to the altar, where A was preparing his priest robes and stuffs. “Ladies and gentlemen…†A began. Tsuna interrupted “Wait, Worm isn’t even here, how do we get them to marry each other?†“Oh.†A said. “Shoot. But never mind, I’ll marry them anyway.†“…†Tsuna mentally sweat-dropped. A continued. “We are gathered here to witness Worm and Jeo join in holy matrimony.†It was at that point that Jeo decided to make a break for it. He tore off his tuxedo (bridal gown?) and dashed off the altar. Tsuna screamed “Runaway groom (bride?)!†A immediately retaliated “CATCH JEO’S FRIGGIN’ BUTT WITH THE NET†he howled. Jeo ran off, and the whole wedding was cancelled. The rest of the time was spent trying to catch Jeo, but unfortunately, admidst “You’ll never catch me!†and “Nevah!†the whole thing crashed, wobbled and PHAILED. The next day, Tsuna related the story to Worm, who kept loling. This is a multiple chapter story, so I'll be uploading the second chapter soon. (I wonder if this chapter is too short?) Do comment. -Tsuna P.S.: @Doom and Komaro: Thankies. :3. @Tokiro: I'm getting excited just reading your introduction! It sounds like a really good intense story! XD |
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on 2011-04-06 19:15:49 |
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@Doom: Exams at the end of the month? Lucky. xD I have a bunch next week. Afterwards I'm free to write, eat, play, dance, and do whatever else I feel like doing until next term. @Tsuna: I'm still loling. "A simply waved aside all protests and stated, 'In order to solve this, Nurse needs to marry me. As for Jeo and Worm, they will marry each other.'" Now THAT is problem solving. xD |
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on 2011-04-14 09:48:50 |
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I would Like To Join The Writers Club if I May. Will post a Short Story After I Get Permission To Join, and I Get Some Time Of From Collage. Thank You!  |
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on 2011-04-14 10:40:14 |
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Accepted. I can't add you to the list right this second. ~Doomlight
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