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Hi~ long time no seeeeeeeeee~ hisashiburi desune~ now what about some continuation... oh before that... K.M.R. : I've finished the first post.... but you add another one huh? well.. okay for the first one it is great! realy enjoy it and releases the stress I got from those test XS currently reading Ugo's post so... I'll comment the second one a bit late... sorry 'kay? Ugo: YaaY~ congratulation Ugo~san! so, your story would be the main story right? I'll try my best to keep up! and eventually make the Arc!^_^ So, we go to the school by the car… On the way to the school I see a cat…. Not really clear know that we’re moving fast… but the cat looks so sad and it was all wet… just as wet as the tall grasses nearby… After gets a bit far from the cat, I could see a bridge… the river below it was almost full of water… I guess if there is a big rain pouring this area, it would make a flood on this flat ground… After crosses the bridge which is a bit long, we see the school where I will do my mission at. So, Mr. Ferdinand moves the car slower and stops right in front of the school. There I could see many peoples entering the school’s medium tall white concrete gate. So I get down from the car and kiss my dad’s hand while smiling afterward. So I get inside the school and got to the principal’s room. The principal didn’t say many word to me, she only told me to wait for my homeroom teacher to pick me up after the bell rings. So, I waited at the principal until a woman with a blonde hair comes… “Hello there,†She says in a soft voice, “Freiya Ferdinand right? My name is Anna, I’m an English teacher and also your homeroom Come on, your classmate are waiting for you.†She continues while smiling at me, so I smile back at her while standing up. The bag I carried isn’t that heavy this time… So, we walk through the hall, I could see that every class had closed its door so that nobody from outside could see what happens inside. So, I decided to see my homeroom teacher… she looks nice from the first impression she gave me… We keep following the hall until we see a classroom with a sign telling that this is class 8-H… my new class. We angels didn’t really study… but we’ve know almost everything that we needed to know… no more than that. Luckily it looks like the real Freiya’s mind is still somewhere here. It shouldn’t be that hard with that. So, we got inside the class. The class is not very busy when I got in… though that I could hear several voices from afar just now. After saying some words, Mrs. Anna letting me to introduce myself. “My name is Freiya Ferdinand. I’m 13 years old; I like Singing and doing planting some plants. I like Soccer as sport, though I don’t play a lot.†I said everything that I knew about this Freiya, “It’s nice to meet you!†I say while bowing myself at them, somehow I feel that I shouldn’t do that…. Almost all of the class was fell in laughter… I didn’t know why so I stand up again and found that my skirt was a bit opened….oh my… why is my heart suddenly beats very fast!? What does this mean? “Hey! How dare you put a shame on me!?†who…. Who’s sound is that? “It’s me the real Freiya it is hh… I was told that my body would be taken by an angel… I don’t know it would be a clumsy angel like you…. Anyway I don’t mean to be mean to you… but you should put my skirt back online now, or we will sorry…†Freiya say in a bit angry tone… Oh… so, you are here… “Of COURSE! Especially you haven’t really known anything about being human. So, I’ll help you out. But I won’t really be helping you very much.†She says with a fading volume… I see… but it was all done when I zip this skirt right? I think while zip the skirt up, the laughter seems stops especially after Mrs. Anna told them to stop laughing at me, but if I see it clearly… there is some girls who didn’t laugh…. They say sorry almost at the same time. Then, Mrs. Anna told me to take a sit. So, I sit in the second row in the second chair from the back. On my left there is a girl with a pink wavy hair, her face is small but her body was just tall. She realize that I’m seeing her, so she turn her body and smiles a bit, “Misha, my name is Misha Marshmallow… nice to meet you†she says while smiles wider and then see the blackboard. On my right there is a boy with a bit messy black hair… he looks like didn’t enjoy the study, and rather draw something on his sketch book, but then he take a look at me and smile a bit… he then moves his hand very fast and like a senior mangaka, he show me a drawing of a boy that looks a bit like him waving his hand and have a dialogue balloon saying “Hello there, my name is Chames Watt, call me Watt!†“Just don’t use h…†he adds while smiling at me In front of me, sits another girl with a long black hair… I couldn’t make her turns because Mrs. Anna had started the class and I don’t want my first impression becomes bad… So, we study the English till the bell rings for the second time… telling us that it is time for the next study… Physics… “Ung…. I don’t really like this… do you?†Freiya asks me... Uh… no… This is bad isn’t it? And yeah… it ends bad… the teacher told me to finish one question which neither me nor Freiya could answer… luckily he wasn’t angry to us who had finished half of the formula. Then the rest bell rings… means that this is the time for the student to relax a bit. Hhh…. I didn’t know that being a human is this tiresome… “Hey Freiya, would you like for a walk through the school?†asks Misha while walking toward me… “It could be nice…†I say while smiling at her, she then widen a smile to me and then grab my right hand. So, we move out from the school… but right at the door, three girls are bounding us from getting out. “Oh, no… those are the trio mess up… they always up to something bad…†Misha says while getting me behind her… â€So, if it wasn’t our Freiya…†says the girl in the center with such annoying tone, “letting a fame by an underwear huh? What an impressive way of coming through.†She continues while holding her right hip. “Don’t budge her Trishya, she didn’t meant to take Sammy’s heart!†Misha tries to help me out but it seems this Trisha girl won’t budge it. “Hmph… she’d better be.†Oh… I hope my mission here won’t be as long as I think… “Unluckily, what I’ve overheard… this is your final destination little angel…†Freiya says with a bit arrogant tone… not… you too… But hey… you meant? “Yeah… you’ll be with me until the very last time you become a human. But, don’t worry you have me as an assistance, and I will never leave you all alone… oh you’d better stop talking with me right now†“Are you okay?†Misha says while waving her hand in front of my face… “Hello!?†“Ah… uh… sorry did I startle you?†I asks while scratching my head. “No, but I thought you were shocked by that Trio Mess up…. Or… do you?†she says with a slow intonation, I only shake my head and we continue our walks…. After several walk in opposite direction from the time I got here, we finally arrived at a courtyard…. “Well, you can see… we are now at the court yard. I usually go to here to practice everyday, I’m the member of the athletic club and I’m best at running.†She says proudly, “anyway… let’s go to the next thing… a more important place in this school where you need to go.†She says cheerfully and then starts jogging after finished the line. So, we jog a bit toward the courtyard and turn left right I meant turn left when we arrived at the center of the field… and then we turn right when we’re almost bump a building… “Taadaa… gym!†oh my… will she just bring me to an athlethic places? “Haha… I’m just kidding Freiya… look behind you…†she says while releasing a laughter… so I turn my back and… “welcome to the cafeteria! The world of hungry students… I mean… the place to get your stomach stuffed!†she says again in a proud mode, now with addition a hip holding… “Whoa.†I could see a very beautiful building with glasses as its wall. The door is also glass but those glasses were framed by a blue plastic bar… So, I tried to enter it and I could feel some delicious foods’ aroma… hmm… somehow it feels good… “ you’d better try one of them… uh…. If you can find it, try some Italian course. I uh we like it very much.†are you sure? “Un… Of course, I’m the real master of this body. Remember?†Oh, sure… okay then… hmm… Italian… ah… Lasagna! “I… I wanted…†Riii~ng… “Wha~?†“Oh, first period of rest really is short, we could continue our journey at the second… and… what did you want?†“Ah… nothing… let’s just get to our class should we?†“yeah…you could tell me later.†I nod as an answer from that question and walk toward the class ~To be continued 
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whoaaaa congrats Ugo that was really well written ^^!!!!!!!! I think I'm going to write the continuation from my earlier entry, see if that can turn to be another arc ^^ 
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Great job Doom! :D Please everyone be ready to start writing the arcs now- Ugo's been really busy, so she told me to ask and remind you guys to be prepared to arc from this story, or make your own arcs or whatever- AND it'd be great if all writer's can attend the next IM session, which i think is dedicated to the plotline, although there might be talk about design and stuff.. Faiz: Great story!! Keep it up! Thanks for posting, hey, you're ready to write arcs aren't you? I think the next IM session is.. this Saturday or the next, but I hope you can be there! I hope you're not too busy!   |
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@Faiz Ah, the little angel starts to learn about being human through high school, eh? It gives it kinda the slice-of-life feel, school style. Or is it distinctly known as the "school life" genre? Anyway, good job on that story. |
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wait ugo is a girl lol? i tottaly died there XDDD. ~Doomlight. P.S. Sure Ill Try to arc off that story if its possible 
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@Basil: Thanks, and yeah well maybe both XD but I'd prefer to just use the slice of life because the background won't always set at the high school. Though Freiya is a junior high school student @Mokona~nee: Thanks^_^. oh about IM meeting what time would it be now? and it is using uh... windows live messenger? or anything?
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Faiz: If Ugo gives the go-ahead, I think it was this week or the next, and yeah, the default is Windows Live Messenger... at 2.00 GMT... I've got no idea how to explain that- sorry! But, if you post your GMT time on the V-N project thread.. maybe Ugo will tell you when to go on in your time ^^ Lol@ Doom, really I can't be laughing, I mix up genders all the time |
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@ All: Thanks you for all the congradulations! *Holds cheeks* Kind of emberassing... Nonetheless, I wish to see everyone else's proposed endings coming next meeting! @ Faiz: Alright! We're starting off! You're story still manages to to keep it's air of mystery, and I think I have a slightly better understanding of the main character thanks to this interaction. There are bit more stagnant sentences and awkward grammar, but things looked very good at the beginning of the entry. I've been so lazy with continuing my stories! So, way to go Faiz!!! @ Doom: Arah... so it strikes again. The male-female mishaps seem to happen a lot on the forums. But that's alright, at least you know now. ^^ @ All: The meeting is still set at 2PM GMT. I think faiz and a couple of others still need to give me contact info an GMT things. Like Mokona-chama said, I'll help out if you get confused with the GMT thingy. (I got it wront many, many times before too >.<) I hope to see people on the writing staff there! Refer to the op post in the DEV thread for misc details!   |
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@All- my prologue of one of my upcoming project Baldr Core: Frontier of the Crimson Sky Prologue: Nightmare Outside of the earth’s atmosphere, a massive orbital station was floating; it was a joint project of the G20 countries for the development of space travel, it was been in operation for a month, but this time the system encountered an error that causes the whole system to reject contexts “What is happening? Why does the feedback system was blocked?†“Sir, were trying to fix the problem, but it seems that the situation worsened every second passes by†“The main system is not responding, even the back-up system was also affected†“We cannot access the administrative system, if this would continue…†“Sire, I have reports from the Power plant area, the life support system and generators are rejecting our protocols†“Try to counteract by any means we cannot let a single error destroy this multi-million project†Suddenly automation bots appeared and started to fire its mounted chain guns at everyone inside, hitting both humans and equipments, the bullets pierced their bodies and blood spilled on the control room, the ones who managed to survive ran with all of their might, then the emergency alarm was instantly activated and everyone inside of the orbital went panic, they rushed towards at the escape pods, but the doors are were closing and locked them up, they panicked and they were desperate, on those who made it they were been chased and pinned down by automation bots, with luck the remaining survivors outsmarted the automation bots and reached the escape pods, they immediately operated it and left the orbital station “Just what really happened? The systems rejected all our command protocols then our automation bots attacked us… Is there any sabotage in this project?†“Don’t ask me we share the same thoughts†Suddenly a communication signal was received by the pods; they were puzzled due to the fact that it came from the orbital station, they opened it, but the screen was black, then suddenly letters appeared one by one as if it was being typed slowly, their eyes widened as the message was complete done “All of you will die…†At the bottom of the orbital a large unmovable turret began to charge it and released its arsenal and destroyed all of the escape pods and eventually hitting the earth’s surface causing a catastrophic cataclysm @All- i cant go with the IM session gain... I have things to attend to... I wanted actually to write the arcs but please could you do a summary for me like what are the requirements for the arcs... characters and etc...etc...  --> |
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@Mokona : 2am/pm? well I can go in both of the time, but if it is am... I guess I can't be too long... (I have to go to school and with +7 GMT that means I have to "wake up" in 9 am) well even though I could go to school anytime but still maybe I'll make it for an hour if it is am... but pm... rock me on!XD whoope... Ugo posted up there...XD okay so it is Pm... but I need to make the account first... okay see you there... 2 pm Gmt right? @Ugo: Wha!? oh my.... I still needed more practice....T~T ohoho... but anyway thanks for reminding me....T~T Whew.... @K.M.R: futuristic + bloody event.... THAT"S COOL... whoa... I even forget to release my little finger from the "shift" button^_^ waiting for the next one~!
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Sorry I'm busy to post guys- !! K.M.R: thank you again for posting another great story! ^^ I quickly whizzed through it, but will read it properly later! Faiz: yeah 2PM, don't forget! ^^ lol with the "shift" button thing xD |
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@All- guys i will post a teaser again of my current project/s next time... then I will try my best to finish my other stories as well just give me time --> |
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Oh hello. It is too late for me to join in? :O Wut should i do in here? xD
I claimed someone that I can't remember because photobucket is ended.
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K.M.R: Hard-working as ever ^^ It's great to see that you're so diligent and producing so many amazing stories! Thanks again K.M.R- i'm looking forawrd to your next teaser!! Holkers- Hiya!! You can post as many of your own stories as you want, it's never too late to join mwahaha. Doomlight will probably add you to the list when he gets around to it- but, welcome! Looking forward to any stories you post! |
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@ KM: Still at it I see. Well, I didnt have enough time to make up a sort of grammatical lesson. So here's a general artistic lesson that you probably already know yourself: DOnt forget to save your work! Looking back at other things will can help you revive awesome ideas that never made it, or pull you out of a writer's block. This is especially relevant for you- Karuzo, since you write a good amount. May I also say, try to mix things up a slight bit. I cant help but recall the bloody medieval entry from reading this one. Not to say you lack ideas- but when you dish out lots of stories in a short amount of time straight form your head, it's likley that there will be some similarity. This is where putting in detail comes in: you can have 2 sentances: Yuri embarked on a long and epic journey to save the world. Luke went on a treacherous and lengthy journey to save the world. Look similar? What if I spent a little while- just a minute, to think about the characters, the place, why everything happened.... After the aqua blastia was stolen from his home in the lower quarter of Zaphias. Yuri Lowell, a former knight of the empire embarked upon a journey to recover the needed item. Along with a mysterious girl who insisted on joining him to find Flynn: Yuri's old friend from the knights. The two would find themselves on a journey that would have earth changing consequences. The young nobleman, Lufe Fon Fabre had his peaceful and secure life at his manor abruptly shattered when a mysterious assassin came to kill his sword instructor. In protecting his master, Luke and the mysterious girl caused a powerful hyperressonance, which telephoned them all the way into the Malkuth Empire, half a globe away from home. Introducing herself as Tear, she promised to bring Luke back to his manor in Baticul. The simple journey, however, would find itself to delve into a complicated problem that threatens to erase all of humanity. ~~~~ Well, it's as I said. The thing that differentiates from a good writer and a novice it their ability to create a clear picture in their head. Not just know that the pan was hot. But that when the pan burnt when it toched the skin, Steam rose as the hot metal sizzled and burned it, the pain was as if a million ants where biting in that one area. This is probably something you can easily do if you wrote in tagalog. So also remember to study up on that english! :P @ Holkers: Welcome-desu~! @ All: Well, I'm not sure if everyone knows the exact date of the next meeting. But it's this Saturday. 27th. Now, the announcements stated that it was on Jul 4th. So yeah, that I guess is the due date for all the proposals. This weeks, however, is basically for early proposals and checking for corectness to storyline plans and asking questions. There's also a couple things I want to get decided apon with Mokona-chama. So just know that if you did pay attention to my date writing error that you dont have to freak about getting done now. For those who did think it was this week or have questions you want to ask the storyboard heads about that this meeting is for just that. Terror-san asked the meeting to start at 4 PM GMT. So yeah, I have to leave it open till then. I'll still be around at least an 30 mins before the old 3 PM GMT start-time for people who cant make 4 PM / time to glomp Mokona :D |
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@Ugo- thank you for that... well the stories i posrted here are actually saved first on my mother laptop and other saving devices then i posted here But yesI can write in tagalog but i prefer using English because it is the universal language just give me time and I will do my best to give it a try --> |
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G-glomp Mokona? O.o Guys! Don't let her do this to Mokona >< save me! *yelps* I think I can make it... but... I can't figure out what time that means for me... so I'll just be on at 3PM onwards... :P That was another great lesson! *claps gleefully* you really are a great writer... |
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@ ALL: Right now with that, may I remind that the due date for proposals is next saturday. You dont need to have anything written down, but you have to be at the next meeting, and be able to answer the following questions related to your arc proposal. The current list of people I'm expecting to have a proposal, are: Faiz! - (Need your instant Messager Info!) Basil - (Contacted...) KM Revolution - (Already Contacted... making separate character) Shuyin - (haven't heard from lately... *pokes screen(helooo?) Ugopetamia - (working on Lax's arc) Mokona - (working on Tyson's arc) I'll contact the ones who I'm iffy on by Tuesday. If you haven't replied or PM'd me by then.... Also, be prepared to answer these sorts of questions at the IM Meeting: New characters you'll introduce (Give Explanation). Relations of the characters (new) to the current. and other tweaks you make specific to your arc. How these new characters are introduced to Aya the first time. What character will you will have Aya end with. (or is it a surprise ending?) What is the ending like. Conflicts for the related arc, and/or how they're resolved. Any other fun parody-like things you want to add. Remember! You basically have full reign over the ending of your arc! I may ask you to insert a detail here or there, or ask for an edit because it conflicts with something very fundamental (basic general detail) to the VN. When all the arcs are put out, that's when I'll make my announcement about how they're supposed tie into one another, as well as how the game will go into the specific endings we'll create after the introductory part. PM me for any question! Yo! Ahaha... It looks like I really haven't been putting in my input for the writer's club - apologies! So time for me to pull out the old language free-write journal. (I cant think of a title >.<) A lot can change in a hundred years. Technology advances, countries are formed and destroyed. Problems are solved, and problems arise. Time passes, and people move on, leaving behind the sands of yesterday. But, for the people who live in the present, who experience the moments, the feelings; are special cases. For- no video, nor textbook can recreate those feelings. The time I came from shocked our entire nation, and the entirety of the world for that matter. Many, many, lives where lost in that long conflict; and many futures, hopes, dreams, and innocent aspirations would never happen. So, I as one who had the great fortune of being able to survive, in memory of my brothers, I write you this story. So that, never again will blood be freely spilled upon the lands of North America. -Col Arthur Anthony - Republic of California, 15th volunteer rifles, District of Arizona "This is GNN Reporting. Tonight, thousands gather at the candlelight vigil in downtown Los Angeles. A disaster, never before seen since the devastating 11th attacks. Military investigations are going into the Department of the Air Force regarding yesterdays air assault on downtown Los Angeles after FWE Extremists took the district-.." "Three months afterwords, crowds across the west coast (of the United States) are protesting the recent Oxley-Preemptive-Defense act, placing the entirety of the west coast under martial law. Tensions are running high between state and federal governments. Public approval ratings for the president have dropped sharply since..." "This is GNN Reporting Live! A nation Divided, here in Phoenix as mobs tear down the National Flag off of the state capitol building. Arizona Marks the 10th state to break from the union. Governor Charles Ramson has declared Arizona will be annexed into the rebel republic of California. The president has called for an immediate recall of all American forces internationally." "China, as well as her SETA allies are threatening the union with military action in President Meong's words: 'China acknowledges the Republic of California as a sovereign nation. Further aggressions by the United States and her allies will be responded with full force..." "The United States suffered a serious defeat in last month's series of air campaign for air supremacy over California. Nearly a third of NATO's air power has been destroyed since the conflict began. With SETA forces preparing to land in America to bolster rebel forces. NATO has declared war upon SETA and are sending a multinational force composed of Middle Eastern and European Union armies in agreement of the Mutual Alliance treaty." The previous, was the procession of events that occurred the year of 2152. In the span of around 120 years, coherence within the United States had deteriorated. Before the start of the conflict, a notable separatist group "Free West America" existed, and demanded full independence for the western states. The list of hundreds of grievances that lead to this point could've filled an entire series of textbooks. At first, the list was small, but as time went on, Washington, for many of the states, started to feel like a distant leader, with the states there for the sole purpose of following it's creed. As such, it was only 25 years earlier that the FWA was formed. The crown jewel of these grievances, as well as the direct cause of the second civil war- was the DLA Incident. Members of the FWA took the downtown district of the city, holding back the police and national guard with their threat that they possessed a thermonuclear device. However, in the ruins of the skyscrapers, no such thing was ever found It was not long after that the states separated. Realizing the government viewed their citizens and cities as expendable, several rebel entities where formed. Taking the land of their former state. The California Republic, and the Republic of Texas, where amongst one of the first to break off. When we all first heard of this watching News in history class, we expected the matter to end in a quick, and hopefully bloodless matter. But, like the same conflict we where faced with nearly 200 years ago, we where terribly incorrect. China, and it's South East Asia Alliance, known as SETA, vowed to maintain the separatist nations. One of the most daring political moves since it had broken relations with western nations nearly 50 years prior. From that point, things drove themselves to the situation I sat in that Summer of 2153. In high school, I always hated learning about the first civil war. Many probably others didn't care either, about a long ago conflict whose veterans where already nothing but dust. But, when my generation was placed in the shoes they marched in to the fields of Gettysburg, and of Shiloh. The fields my generation would call Yosemite National, and Joshua Forest... Sierra Nevada, and Springfield; we, more so than any other generation, would come to have reverence for them. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I kinda had no idea to write that day, so then I randomly remembered one of my friends complain about why they hated history. We where learning about the Civil War at the time, so... Yep! This also draws from similar ideas from a game called "Shattered Union" which is basically about a modern day American Civil War. I'm not politically intelligent. So dont waste your time explaining to me how this is totally impossible. Because I'll probably fry my own brain after reading an intelligent paragraph. ^^' |
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Update the front page againn. Mokona. Its only 5 days lol. Im getting there. Ugo. ummm....are you a guy lol XD. Nah i know your a girl :3. So your story is like wow. It looks great i can't wait to read more. But im guessing the main character will be a...girl lol? If that did happen to the USA. Well...We Got Canada Lol. Holkers. Welcome To The Guild/Club/ Something All. Im Most Likely going to read Everything Starting from Ugo's Post lol. Sorry if i missed any good stories but yeahhhh....well ill see what i can do. in the mean timee *writes my fail story* Ill post it when i can. But so far my summer has been hectic ~Doomlight
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