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@ Basil: Hah, you're right. But, probably the position I want to go into in the gaming department is focused on one of the other aspects of development. Mostly in character design, plot creation and presentation, and basically things related to the said games world in general. I, kinda want to make a game leaves a lasting impact, or a game plot that can keep a player going just to find out what happens next. But... of course I probably should know the nuts and bolts of doing programming as well, Ugo can only be hopeful and work hard... Whee~! As always you do an outstanding job of character characterization. Your writing described the events quite vividly. Though the profanity in the piece seemed a little, excessive. While I suppose considering the characterization and type of genre we're talking about I guess it's a given. But it just felt used a bit much in my opinion. Hm, I suppose everyone here would be modest enough to call themselves amateur, and maybe that is true, still, I hold your writing skill with high esteem! @ Faiz: Gambatte! Ugo doesn't even know what exactly a thesis is but wishes you the best of fortunes! ^-^ @ Mokona: No! You're not wierd! Just you're own brand of unique~ >-< @ All: Uwaaa... I think Doomlight missed the post about indexing all the stories. Well, until he reads this or comes back again, I guess I'll do the indexing myself. If one of your guys' stories didn't have a name, I'd advise to try to edit it in you're post in a day or two, as that's when I'll start the indexing. Yay~! I managed to get through testing without much of a hitch! I actually feel kinda confident. Last minute cramming study sessions FTW! *Victory sign* With that away, I guess I'll be able to start writing the second part to Re:Play. Please look forward to it!   |
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@ all thanks for the wishes...T~T Thesis is somekind of scientific works (I didn't really know the English of it but it is the part where we write an analytical exposition about something that happens in the neighborhood or even the world...) I myself is taking the Global Economic Crysis and the effect to my country... @Ugo yeah... thanks... and hm... I agree... Basil looks more than amateur.^_^ Especially in kind of weaponry... ( I myself really likes weapons... but can't help to remember it....-_-... or even knows the basic data like Basil did *Hail Basil!* ^-^) @Tsubasa... Sorry... forgot to say welcome^~^!.... I'm waiting for your story okay? Better be a good one! -_-... XDDDD no... just kidding every story are good. @all okay... I'm almost done... just going to add the references... and I guess tomorrow will be a great day for me.... MWAHAHAHA! .... nah... okay then see you guys next time! 
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@Faiz: Thanks, I am currently thinking a good plot for my story this time.... gah, I can't express my thoughts when I am writing my story in English...  |
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@tsubasa welcome ^^ @ugo hm.. i'm still thinking about the title hehehe. well maybe after this post ^^ @basil uooo good job ^^ love it ^^ ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ Two years has past from the first “Regret†incident. Police never catch the culprit or being that was accused of or ever knew where it came from. No terrorist claimed, no ransom asked, nothing. But this nothing is more frightened than what policeman had imagined when they enroll. Undefeated.., untraced.., unseen.., an unknown. The worse kind enemy. It seems in the past year many similar events had occurred around the world. Many people reported missing, mass murder that only known after it was happened. Religious people claim it to be the end of the world. And it seems more and more people are thinking the same. There even a group of people making religion out of it and gain popularity nowadays. Prior one year after the first incident there are a report that strange thing have been found in the ocean. It was an arm, an arm of a monster or something. The analysis said that the arm is similar to what the first accident witness saw. The founding of the arm put the society more alert than before. Some group of people started to put a demonstration voicing about how the government should react more to protect its citizen. Some started to guess that this is an alien work or some said that this is a biological experiment that went wrong. There are a lot of speculations but one thing is true. There are more and more incident going on and it’s getting worse. One and half year after the incident I’ve found a note from my daughter diary. I should have found it earlier, but because I’m afraid to step into that house again. I wondered why police never found this note. It seems that the police are not comfortable to fully investigate my house. This is what was written. “Today, when I play with mic-chan in the park, I saw a black dot in the sky. When I told mic-chan about it the dot was gone. I wonder if it an UFO hehehe ^^; UFO on top of the shopping district I wonder if tomorrow they are going to be headline in the news Silly me Man the P.E. teacher is a demon!!! >: 50 laps!!! Did he want to kill us!!!†*** “Today, I feel uneasy. The news about the shopping district really bothers me. Is it a premonition?? I talked to mic-chan today and she said that it was just coincidence. Heck I should have worry about the test instead. Just one more month!! GANBATTE!!!!!†*** “Today, after the test I’ve seen similar thing again in the sky. But soon disappeared, it has been one month after the first time I saw it… it’s creeping me out!!! After I got home, I watch TV until 3 in the morning. Mom got mad. But I’m glad it seems that was just my imagination.†*** “ARGHH!!! Why the time fly so fast. There’s going to be test again. The teacher really loves tests don’t they…. >: There is some disturbance again today… it’s been 2 month since I first saw the dot. Today it was mic-chan. She saw it above the department store. She said that she saw a black dot and a rift in the sky… wonder what she meant by rift. “ *** “Today I really scared. The news has a headline about the department store. I locked myself in my room. I never come out even when mom asked me what happen. Good thing that today is a holiday. If not I bet mom will forced her way in and told me to go to school. Later that day mic-chan called me. She too was shocked.†*** “Nothing had happened this past two month after the incident of the department store. I think that there will be no more incidents. Mic-chan is back to her old self…….†*** After this it seems that she continue the writing later on “When I come back from the convenient store I saw the black dot above my house. I ran into the house and all seem fine..†This is the weird part.. I don’t know who’s writing this. By the look at it, it was my daughter but by the text there is no way that my daughter has written it. It seems it was writing her thought “Something strange happen, the house is getting warmer. It’s only a while after I finished writing on my diary… I must go out the house. I have to get mom. Mom!! MOM!! Where are you!!! Where is she at the time like this!!! I have to get help first!! WHAT!!! The door is lock!!! Oh come on!!! Open up!!! OPEN UP!!! AHHHH!!!! THE WALL!!!! WHY IS IT TURNED RED!!! DON’T TELL ME THAT IS BLOOD!!! MOM!!!! DAD!!!HELP ME!!! MOM!!! I have to get out from the house, the garden. I have to get to the garden!! MOM!!! MOM!!! Why is she lying here… don’t tell me… NOOOOO! MOM!!!! WHO?! WHAT ARE YOU!! WHAT DID YOU do TO MOM!!! HELP!!! DAD!!! ANYONE!!! ARGHHHH!!! WHY THIS DOOR TOO!!!! NO!!!! DON’T COME NEAR ME!!!! NOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!†*** My daughter diary ends there. It seems that she had lost her life in the process. Whatever thing that it, it seems that he had her wrote those thing. These bastard thing! This is exactly two years after the first incident. The world has thrown into chaos. The “Regrets†is more active and they have appeared in front of us, in front of humanity. But still they are not assaulting in the daylight. It seems that they mark their victims first. Mostly places, so everyone that was in that place had transfer to different dimension marked by the red color. What they do after the victims capture is that either they kill them to get their life force or possess them and become their agent. The later are only select few. I have resigned from my job in the newspaper company. It seems that my company also got the incident. It was that one day after I got my daughter diary. I saw black dot above the building. Now the company is no longer. And I think that what in my daughter diary is true. I mean the later part. The “Regret†likes to put their victim last thought in record. From numerous source How did I know this information?? Because I’m already being possess. AND WHAT WOULD YOUR THOUGHT LIKE TO BE WRITTEN HERE??? 
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Lockey: Waaa~! Epic! ==' It actually freaked Mokona out a bit :P And yes. Yes. Teacher's do really love their tests. :S Now I can't even look at a bird in the sky without getting freaked out? Good stories make people believe, and i believed this story is true, good for you, but very bad for me. *looks around nervously* Ugo: Ha ha ^^ loved how you put that. Own brand of unique lol. Errr, scratch my first story form the list if you have to- don't really like it, but if it has to have a name, i'll think of one for you ^^ I'll definitely look forward to the next part of your story! All: Err, yeah.. about typing up the rest of the other story... yeah.. no... that's not going great... besides, the author who finished it off for us (no offence) did a really crappy job, unbelievable, my fellow classmates were cheesed too, i mean [&*^%$£*&].... oh right, right, let's just say that it wasn't any good. SO, as i've relayed to a couple of people already, maybe i could get around to typing it up- and host it as the beginning for a competition for us club members to finish off? I think then, the winning one, well, you know think of a prize and all that- but if this small mission of mines actually succeeds, i really can't wait if i can print it out and show it to the others who worked on the story with me, plus my english teacher. Really. (okay, maybe not, got too hype) Anyways, what does everyone think of a competition? I understand Basil and Faiz and Ugo are working on stories (and you guys can finish it off), we can wait for the go ahead from Doomlight? Please give your thoughts on this. ^^ ~ Your very own Mokona-san ~ (lol, i'm being more weird than usual :P )   |
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on 2009-05-05 10:10:36 (edited 2009-05-05 10:11:19)
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@Lackey Woah... That was really awesome! Kinda felt like a horror-survival scenario. @Ugo Well, I spew out more profanities in an hour, but don't worry, since the protagonist is in retirement, the cussing will be reduced to a maximum of... nothing, I think. @Faiz Mine's that detailed? Awesome! Even I'm not aware of it! Well, hope your thesis gets great grades. @Mokona Why are you hitting me in the head? I am, in fact, an amateur writer. |
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@All- Vector Crisis will be lat in a while becasue I am in the process of brainstorming... much details needs to redo I have a new upcoming story/stories to compensate my problems..... Do not worry I will do my best to post them here  --> |
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@ Mokona... sorry... uh... I didn't really understand.... uh.... about... the post...>_< very sorry! but what did you mean by the author?0-0 what author.... and the go ahead from doomlight? You mean Doomlight's story? uh.... very sorry (I don't know why... maybe I'm sick of that thesis until I became like this @-@....) one more thing Mokona~san... it didn't really good for you to be like that... (believing stories....) last time when I heard a great story about monster below bed... I ended up can't sleep well at night... since then I started to fight the story so that I wouldn't be too scared... (though still it makes me scared (Lockey's story)).... remember you only live once. @Lockey: Whoa... terrible ending... yes... makes me chilled out... you as usual made a great visualization... makes me can't post this post last night....-_- (I read it last night and....) very great!^^ @Basil : thanksT~T and about your story yeah.... somehow... it looks like you were opening W1k1p3d14.0r6 when you were writing this story. it is tensing and yeah... very great on making the story really alive... yeah even good guys have their own bad days. and about amateur... in the term that I haven't read any story book (real one not here,,,) of yours... you are amateur... but in term of creating a story you are more than amateur! maybe a little bit more practice could even make you defeat J.K. R0wl1ng (Spelled it right, right?) @K.M.R: I'm waiting for your story then!^-^ uh... so... for my own story.... (sorry though it hasn't completed yet... so there might be some mistakes that should be fixed later on... (Being a Human!) The sun’s light wakes me up from my slumber… hhh…. Another time of being human…. Now what…. Hmmm… a house… I guess I’m at some kind of couple’s house and exactly in a comfortable small pink room at a soft small pink bed which is fits for me, a bolster and a pillow… I’m also covered like a sausage in hotdog by a pink blanket with some white rabbit pictures. But the good thing that comforts me here wasn’t really because of the home… it is more about the people here…Well yeah… nothing is wrong as far as I concern… The room has everything in pink. Starts from the window’s frame at the left of the bed; the study table bellow the window which actually has more white than pink; a plastic chair; even the wardrobe that was across both of it and placed right at the edge of this room. Next to the wardrobe was a door with the same color… Then… a little light comes near to my ear and explain the situation in the language that I usually speak…. “Honey come down quick… you’re going to late your first day school†says a woman in a French dialect… I could tell from the way she says ‘you’re’; ‘first’; ‘school’ and the intonation. “Yes mom…†After getting the information from my friend I now know that this lady calling me is a French woman that had married a man one year ago… me, I’m using the refraction of the existence of their daughter…. “Freiya….. hurry up!†says my mom… yeah… guess I’ll just go down… can’t really makes her wait too long… So, I make my way through the spinning clear blue stairs and then I could see “My†mom, Francoise Ferdinand and “My†dad Kurt Ferdinand…. Both of them known to be a good couple and always do many good things… but since…. “Freiya… what are you doing there… hurry up!†say Mrs. Francoise… seeing that, I could only sit at a blue sofa covered by a green abstract painting of something. The frame looks like made of teak I guess… I could see that Mr. Ferdinand has read a newspaper to the middle… while the headline is surprising me… The story telling me that the girl at the inn was the missing daughter of a baron. She was kidnapped few weeks before… that’s why nobody could remember her thin face. But that makes her really prettier than the photo of her past… Then I skim the news… and found Betty… the name of the innkeeper. The baron gave her some money as the gratitude. And now Betty has a better inn to be established… she is now one of the famous inn keeper in British… That was some story…. Well… Now I had a new mission waiting… wonder what kind of thing will happens in such ordinary life like this one… So… I begin to eat my food. Hmm… I usually can’t sense what humans sense for foods… strange…. Maybe this is what humans would call as delicious…. I can feel some kind of comfortable feeling in my mouth… there is some kind of sensation that I couldn’t say with mere words. I guess I’m starting to feel the climax of my wants and begin to think… “Doshite sono toki watashiwa sono koto wo imshita……†(Why should I said it that time…) at least I still have some angelic ability; I know that Mrs. Francoise made this with respect and love feeling…. Then.. I suddenly feel another comfort coming from my back… oh… it was Mrs. Francoise that coming from my back… she kissed my forehead and I could feel safety even though I usually feels safety every time… but this time is different. I could feel as if I was back at heaven… though the vibe wasn’t that strong. “Are you okay my dear? You looks so different†She says once again in a French dialect. She tries to see if my temperature goes higher than her or not. And it looks like it was normal… so I just shake my head as 'no' “Freiya,†I see Mr. Ferdinand calling my name, so I see him at once… he lowered the newspaper that he read “Let’s get going should we?†Oh… forgot… here I’m the second year of Amour Junior High School's new student. I shouldn’t make a bad first impression. So… I fasten my stomach and ready myself to go to my new school. At least mine until the mission was over… then, Mr. Ferdinand goes to his car at the garage which is just beside the house. The car was elegant and looks more like a sport one… the color is metallic black. Mr. Ferdinand tell me to got inside, so I got inside and see a very beautiful interior which is almost all of it was black. The sofa at the back is enough for three people to sit on, while the front well there are two of it but only fit for one person each. There is a box on the ceiling, I guess it is the thing you called lamp. So, we go to the school by the car… to be continued....
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@ Key: Ohh, have to admit I was a little confused at the start with the format, but the ending parts tied everything together nicely. Ahh, the plot thickens!!! >_< @ Faiz: Yay, the story is moving towards a set way now. I still cant say much since its still in the intro. So lets keep going! @ All: Well, I compiled all the infos related to the.... uh, index of stories. Here we are! I think doomlight can make the links under our names in the member list. Check if I have everything! The titles are arranged chronologically and by member. Entries without titles are simply called "entry x". click here for spoiler |
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@all- hi there.. A teaser from my new project Fatale Nights: Merciless Origin The Fallen The entity held on the spear and took it out from his body, it was so fast was it could have killed an ordinary human, the knights were shocked on the view without any adieu, he used the spear to kill two knights by stabbing their chests that made their hearts cut into halves, he took the spear and amputated their bodies mercilessly, blood spilled o the ground, more knights attacked, he smiled as its enemies were getting closer to him, from his devil wings spiked chains whipped and sliced them, the entity flashed moved and torn their limbs and heads away from their bodies, the entity continued his game, a gory and shamelessness game, as the knights attacked more he just received them like a toothpick poking on him and attacked calmly but bloody, he amputated their body parts their blood spilled more their muscles were visible, bones were broken badly, grey matter flew away from their heads, intestines hanging or blowing from their lower abdomen, the entity walked closer the chains did its bidding, the gunners and archers of the cult fired their weaponry, the entity blocked all of it with its angelic wings, the wings was pierced but no blood flowed from it “What are you?†“You shall die demon!†“Release more! Kill it before it kills us!†More projectiles were released, but the entity just blocked it, the entity just smiled seeing this event “Me? A demon? But to tell you are more than any demon existed†The angel wings uncovered and released a powerful gust of wind that made the entity’s enemy to flew away or loses their guard, suddenly feathers darted them and pierced their bodies, they screamed in pain until their souls were no more *-*-* Suddenly the cult oracles summoned a portal, the portal doors has two skeletons wielding a scythe and “Now let us see if you can handle these!!†The portal door was opened and demonic beasts were released and attacked the entity, they covered his body and trying to feast on its body “Haha you are weak, you can’t stand a chance against these creatures, and you will experience such painful and morbid death†The oracles laughed but, they heard a voice “So these are the reason why you sacrificed the people once a week, to be the food for them†Suddenly the demonic beasts started to move away from the entity, their eyes were widened as they saw that the entity’s body is complete no signs of flesh being neither chewed nor torn “IMPOSSIBLE!†“THIS IS RIDICULOUS!!†“HOW COME?! HOW COME THAT YOU ARE STILL ALIVE!?!?!†“I am a being neither light or darkness, I have the affiliation of both Heaven and Hell, I felt the sadness and I heard the cries of the people that you killed at the same time I felt the their anger and fear†thats only a teaser from my new projects I am editing 3 stories becasue i dont want to be bored in my school the problem is i can only edit these stories during night or I had the possession of my mothers laptop becasue my PC is unreliable much Do not worry about Vector Crisis it goes under construction. I am not unto non-fantasy story I need to make sure that the story is reality related no impossible things like happen like a person dropped from 43rd floor building without any parachute and hit the ground hard and survived @All- i will start to continue to the stories that needs my attention --> |
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Omg Ugo. Howw the hell. I've been like struggling to do that and have it organized for the main page ._. If you dont mind if you can send me that lol so i can put it on the front post :D BTW i dont plagurize lol. ~Doomlight P.S My book got taken by a teacher so im waiting to get it back. Got a new idea for a story basing it off the ending of my first book. 
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Woo~ hey Arc! I'm sure Doomlight will let you join! Please post lots !! Faiz: sorry for my babbling~ what i meant was: Is anyone interested in a Writer's Club/Guild Competition? Good job on your last story btw! Good as always. Ugo: Nice one!! It's great! K.M.R: Very nice teaser! Hope to hear more fomr both stories now! All: watch this space- got something 10/10 important to say!! |
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Arc it's write lol. Also Sure :D. Added New Member. Welcome to the club Arc :D. ~Doomlight Mokona Can't Wait :D
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Sorry for being not-so-active for the week; I've been juggling writing my story, making a game mod, and writing for a visual novel project. That leads me to something: how about a visual novel story project? I got the Ren'Py Visual Novel engine, so I'm basically experimenting with it. @Mokona 10/10? Well, I'm quite curious. |
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What's with the new sig Basil? XD It's v.nice! Hey, why not- what do you need for the visual novel project? :P @All: Oh yeah, about the competition, so basically it's like i post a beginning to a story and you guys finish it off- and then someone (me, me!) gets to judge who's is the best and then we can all make it an official story! And then I dunno, maybe Basil could do the Visual Novel thing for the winning story, though i still have no idea what that is ^^ *Blushes* I'm not so sure I wanna post it now... It was a spur-of-the-moment thing... anyways, i'm gonna type it up, and if people want, i can type it up here for you guys to see, |
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@ Karuzo: Whoow... that teaser seems pretty dark! @ Doomlight: Sent! Huh, what kind of teacher takes a book and not gives it back? @ Arc: Welcome! Hahah, more talent comes it. Ugo's soon going to look like the real amateur here. ^^" @ Mokona: Nooo! It's always nice to have another entry. The only time I'll ever say an entry is bad is when it's trolling, spamming, or something I can name 7-10 errors in right off the bat. Ugo will join in the competition too - provided I can think of a story then... Basil's siggy is kinda also a banner link to a sort of third party VN project. You should see it! @ Basil: Sure! I'd be more than happy to volunteer my services in helping in writing for such project. Just that, what exactly do you need help in? (Would it be an extension to the VN linked in your siggy?) |
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Ugo: Ahh! I DID not know that! ohh, kowl! The site's awesome! So that's what a V-N is! yayyyy!! Ugo will be part of my competiton? weee~ thanks !! Hmm, i've always had trouble in thinking of a suitable prize.. a V-N would be great for the winning story!! Yes~ Mokona will judge- along with anyone else who would like to be part of the judging panel- lol, does not include: Lockey, Faiz, Basil, Ugo, K.M.R- i want you guys to join the competition >< !! |
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Well, I guess I'll join the competition. And what Mokona just suggested is a great idea! The winning story gets a visual novel version! Of course, the winning author has to edit the story to accompdate multiple paths and endings, just like those Choose Your Own Adventure books. But then, what we'll need are illustrators and musicians, but the music's not much of an issue. Anyway, I posted the new sig to promote a good VN. The makers of that game were actually from 4-chan, so I was inspired to make one, but I'm still struggling to learn advance coding, so I won't be able to promise a polished game in the end. So, any ideas? |
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@basil ahhh I know that game... I would like to pick it up from the net if they going to release it full ver. I believe right now it still english patch for demo @KM n Faiz sorry I haven't read your story (will do it soon, promise) @mokona, faiz... thx for the ... (felt guilty a bit..... nah) comment ^^ @basil I goes for fantasy hehehehe (but yeah it's more on to horror-survival-> at that point ^^) @ugo when I write I intend it to be confusing and by the end it cleared heheheh seems I got it but it's not over... there's more to that part but I cut it off... seems my mind a bit stale for the part TT ---------------------------------------------------------------- @mokona sure if you want to make a competition, I join ^^ @basil about VN, before there's also a group of people from gendou that have a project on doing VN.. but end up not doing it... (I'm part of it too) if you need help on that I can get hold of the others, see if they still interest or not ^^ (you might know some of the people... but it seems lately they not active in gendou... me too actually, just recently being active too) @arc welcome @doomlight might as well say hello to the TC ^^
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Wait wait wait, what is this? a competition? Wait wha? More information pl0x?  |