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ERRR TYPO!!!!!.........Tragic became Tragig....-_-;.  |
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Don't worry. I have to go back and fix my posts all the time... -Myself, along to home With my life's last little hope I laugh at the sordid joke find humour in the misery and loss. Your friends say you're aware but you probabally don't care or really have those feelings for me. I stand on Bishop's Row knowing full well where I'll go and the answer is simply far away. I can't bear to stay around I feel I only hold you down I think you'll be better without me. With my life's lastlittle hope I laugh at the sordid joke find homour in the failure that's me. |
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How realistic Wait Forever is...unfortunatly. Made me remember things I've tried to forget but anyway, what a good job you did with that one. Can't relate to Myself, along to home but it's okay. *Gasps*Doc, is it possible your losing inspiration? (yes, it's sarcasm)     |
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ahemm.. to post a poem i need to smoke and think about yesterdays quotes about things that brings happiness and laughter to my minisize brain i got everything i nid a table of pizza and one case of beer together with my peers going in for the thrill moving on for the kill ~.. its one of those days where my brain starts to think seriously! nyahhahhaa!!  |
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-Skies My skies are blue Fading away to shades of grey And I miss you and I don't want to feel this way. I told a lie When I said everything's OK and I can't decide whether or not to that I should say I love you every moment of every day. Can you see? Can you see my heartfelt effort? dripping honesty with each note. Can you still turn your back and say goodbye or would you stay Realise what I say is true that my skies are blue. Can you see? Can you see my state of being? Can you still say I'm only dreaming if so don't wake me I've given up In dreams at least you love me too all in here my skies are blue. In the gentle snow made of love notes slowly burning I hope you know the heart just keeps on yearning. AndI miss you so Loving you and slowly learning how it hurts to try to let go And cloud these skies of blue Or am I dreaming so? Can you feel? Can you feel this hope I'm keeping. I don't know, if the dream comes as I'm sleeping try to clarify my dreams at night from what I see at day. At night do you dream too? Dreaming that your skies are blue? Could you say, could you say that you still love me? Or am I really living in my own fantasy? Tunnel without light under a clouded sky I still cry I love you even as my dreams fade, my skies are blue. |
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That wasn't depressing...Wow, you actually wrote something non-depressive. Not taking into consideration the typos, I loved it. Skies has just become my favorite. |
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You'll have to forgive the typos,that was a hell of a lot to write. Again. Either way, was it not depressing? That's good. I'm glad you liked it. |
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It was sad not depressing... You know, I get the feeling we are the only ones who post in this thread. |
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Really? Nooo... Surely not... Untitled Two Did you listen to me? When you walked away? I still remember the gleaming in your eye the way you smiled at me the way you watched me die. I was holding on forever trying to convince myself there was still hope for you. The wanting has destroyed me time has now deied me hopelessness will find me. All the rumors your friends told you all the rumors are true. |
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Post a Poem?? here it goes... Heaven It’s a risk having you here in my arms Even though you said that you meant no harm The problem is… you’re not allowed to be with me Because you’re an angel and we’re not meant to be It is like stealing from God when I am with you But what can I say? You’re just too good to be true I can’t even take my eyes away from your face Your angelic face made beautiful by God’s grace How can I say this in front of your curious eyes? That I made a crime that no one can compromise I took you away from your peaceful lair And here you are, touching my yellow hair. If I will be punished because of that I’d rather accept it than give you back Because it feels like hell if you are gone Because you’re my heaven, my only one  |
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(Untitled) I keep you near me, in the back of my mind. No seperate anxiety just biding my time. Alone in my room I sware that I'm fine. Just a flawed human made in god's own design. Do you remember beyond the photographs? Temporary injuries and shadows that never passed. Please won't you free me from this hole six feet deep, and take me back to happiness conently to sleep. |
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My bad, I accidently pushed quick reply... Amyway, Doc, I feel like this one is missing something, maybe angsty or whatever it is you call it. It's not bad, it's just dull. |
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If ti says untitled then chaces are it's something I scribbled without thinking about it. I really only title works I put some effort into. That onewas written on the back of the page wtih Atomic Heart Meltdown. |
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Come on Doc, I want quality reading. |
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-Never Knows Best As time slips by, I'll waste my life away. no regrets, no chance to hear what you say. And I know my way of living will one day be the end of me. Try at least to understand you only really ever get much less than youever see. I don't want advice and I don't wanna know how to live right. I will make mistakes on my own time. Cause after all what have I got. my life on the line? Everything in life's a test so no one ever knows what's best. I wanna see the skies of blue I wanna keep, my old photographs of you. And I know we're really just pretending if we think we can carry onthis way. And I know the world is always spinning for every night there's every day And who knows who give in and who will go down kicking? I don't want advice and i don't wanna know how to live right. Just wanna have a laugh my race is run and who's to say when at last I'm having to much fun? But I'm thesame as all the rest So I will never know whats best. I never know best I never know best I never know best I never know best (pause) Cause I'm the same as all the rest Cause I can never know best. |
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And with that, you have just restored my liking for poetry. TTYL. And keep up the good work. |
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I really enjoy your material doctor and you have so many! most of it i can already imagine as lyrics to songs. i always have trouble imagining my stuff as lyrical even though i try to make everything ryhme. i would post more often and offer more in depth critque along the levels of skyalchemist even! if i had more oppurtunities to get online as well as time to be on a computer for that matter. about my poem, yeah, i dont see how anyone can understand it. its my most obscure poem i have ever written. most of mine were about be lovelorn and a few about being bitter about the whole matter. this poem is actually a sort of wierd ode to that girl i like...shes one tough nut to crack...considering how nutty she is! if anyone can understand it better, it would be her since i put so many ques that remind me of her in it. after i gave it to her as a birthday card....she commented not at all about it, go figure. anyways, i will try to also post in this thread along with the Dynamic Duo,yes, you doctor and skyalchemist!
I could give no less because I could give no more. ~myself
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-Cheers Familiarity has bred contempt distance opens wounds. The one real friend I have left has just walked out of the room. Farewell my brothers, every mothers son and may we yet drink together when at last our race is run. |
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Do my eyes decieve, Or did I just see her pass? But a fleeting dream. O, shimmering sun, Why do you burn my eye so? I shall look away. O, sanctuary, You repair my boken soul. Gendou rocks my socks! Why dost mine soul burn? I can hear its searing screams. Please halt these sick flames. Haikus are the best, they are so easy to think up! :)
Wise Man says: "Take a dog off its leash and it will wander."
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OMG! I didnt even realize this was still around. Im an idiot. I start a thread and then forget about the whole darn thing. Well in the begginning I think I promised to post here often so in repayment ill give my favorite three poems ive ever written. The short and the long... Yawp! and with a mighty conundrum of a roar the man; made mouse, yawped from the rooftops Why have I been so mistaken and forsaken what is the source of my misery and my life who deigns me so distraught and unnerved furious the passions of life are within me jubilee and horror do wage war within me screaming inside to without my utter loss of comprehension tell me oh great speaker of speakers what am I destined for make clear to me my purpose life cannot be this sham I see before me point me down my chosen path I tire of leading myself to sorrow I tire of hope and thoughts of tommorow with that the man; made mouse, fell from the rooftop and with a whisper he was gone with the tiniest whisper the mouse; made man, spoke from the corner how have I been so heightened and enlightened what is the source of my wonder and delight who deigns me so fortunate and empowered awesome are the passions of life within me understanding and insight flow through me Laughing inside to without my utter joy in existing tell me oh great bestower of gifts what have you destined me for tell me of my purpose Can life possibly be more than this utopia before me point in any direction and I shall wander i grow anxious to discover and find lost knowledge to recover with that the mouse; made man, sprang from the corner and with a holler he was gone Blind Eyes I walked amongst men they watched me with lifeless eyes I left them staring A little R 'n' R straight from me to you words flowin' from the tip of the pencil ill make you a stencil no a mental picture read my words see the world crashing through you like a freight train readin' my poetry is a drain on your mind cant find my meaning im no longer theming this is straight rhythm and rhyme high time you find a blind mime to close your eyes and cut your ties to the world physical come into the world fictional breath in some fresh air but not through your mouth your hair pull it straight into your brain its all musty in there where did all the new ideas go listen up im letting you know a couple good secrets live without regrets don't get upset the worlds a hard place but life's not a race so don't hurry don't worry were a blink in the eye of time its never too late to climb and not the corporate ladder i don't know what's sadder what we've done to the world or what we've done to eachother there's no point to war no point in crime all we really need is rhythm and rhyme politics is full of corruption and lies its a pig sty politicians are swine religion is full of zealous martyrs for starters who told you to die its a lie what good comes from taking another life the world has enough strife already natural disasters, disease, hunger its a wonder that were living at all so take life as a gift take the short shift go out on the town mess around live it up cause you never know when it'll end don't pretend your going to live forever never say never don't give out excuses excuses are useless just go on and do it putting off for tomorrow what should be done today is another way of saying you don't care and you'll go nowhere life's not fair but its all we've got and wether or not you find the spot marked x and find the treasure chest we have to make the best of what were given like what they say about when life gives you lemons push on and push forward go toward the light not the one in the tunnel the light of peace never cease to hope and do what's right in a fight between a pen and a sword a pen has more might sleep on the words i've told you good night Thats all for now. Awesome poetry everyone. Doc, really diggin it, your great man. Everyone else, be more like doc... JK great work one and all!  |