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@ Hika-Chan: That's a great poem!!! I can feel the emotion in it!!! I like the part where you compare love to a double edged sword, because it is sooo true! Anyway very nice work! @ Toyumi: Ah, I have gimp too, but I haven't really used it since last summer, but if we want to share files or something, I can start using it more often ^.^ And I'll get right on the avy change... :) @Holkers: Sorry you had a tiring day, but your poem was brilliant!! I like how it can be sad and happy at the same time!!!  |
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on 2010-04-24 20:50:06 (edited 2010-04-24 20:50:14)
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I'll just passing by.. XD I'm thinking of remaking that poem though.. XD And I'll steal Toyumi's work and make it my entry in my school! Hahaha, lol. That's a joke.. XD 
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Re: Poetry Club v2
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on 2010-04-24 23:06:53 |
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@ Carrot: Well I'll be waiting to read it, though it is already quite good as it is! I was falling, falling so hard and so fast. Nothing seemed to be going my way. You were falling, falling so hard and so fast everything you did seemed to be wrong. I hated to see you down, so I forgot my sorrows to bring your smile back once again. I stayed up late staring blearily at my screen, as yet another speech bubble popped up. I waited with each passing moment, just hoping for a chance to tell you the truth. You say you love her, but things aren't just going right anymore. I tell you it's going to be ok, while I want you for myself. Then you finally give me a chance! You ask me a simple question and my conscious gets to me, that angel on my right shoulder that is constantly telling me not to meddle. Yet you don't give up, and you press on as usual each question bringing a smile to my face until finally you ask "is it me?" and I don't know how to reply. It's quite for a while and your speech bubble is blank, I stare at the screen with my heart beating at a million miles a second. and you say "well I have to admit I like you too." and from then on I've been on cloud nine! well there you go, something from me, that I wrote on the spot, I might re-work it some, but I hope you like it. |
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Re: Poetry Club v2
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on 2010-04-25 03:25:35 |
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I see few more new members in the club! 1st of all, a very warm welcome to all the new members. (Shizue and Hika-chan). ^Topic: For the time being, most of my poem is short, so it won’t take long, a week or so will do. Unless, I really have a free time to start with a long one, it might take weeks. @Toyumi Hmm.. Yup, you’re right. After all, to create a poem or a story, we have to take days to think about it and make it perfect. Nice idea you have there as well. A poetry competition, it can really help to rate and give credit to all the beautiful poems created. A banner is a good idea as well. @Anke Owh~ well, I guess we are in the same situation here. Anyway, I feel rather happy just to help my friends out. I don’t really mind if they didn’t do the same for me. *although, feel lonely at times* It comes from a sincere heart :3 What’s your opinion on this one? O.o Wow, another long beautiful piece of "art" you have there. It makes me feel heartbroken. While reading, I’m emotional connected to it. X.x and the latest one,its amazing at how you connect something imaginary in life. If I'm not mistaken,its someone watching a television scene. @Carrot Your poem is amazing although it’s a bit outspoken.However I can really imagine teachers and students cracking their head to find out the true meaning of a poem with too much metaphors or symbolism. Anyway, Put on a nice title to it and you are sure to make an impact!!*sorry, late reply here* are you going to create something new? Anyway,can't wait.(x.x) @Holkers Thanks. The maze*I have to really find my way out*ahaha Taking a look at how net working can connect us together,nice poem with different types of expression there. @Hika-chan Nice. Kind of sad and depressing.A credit for it. ............... A poem with two lines each. This time its kinda simple too. I don’t really know why I put in the title Leisure in my poem this time. What about enjoyment? Anyway, hope you all like it. LEISUREWhat is life if, full of hope, We have no time to play and enjoy. No time to play beneath the bough, And enjoy as long as horses or donkeys. No time to see, when houses we pass, Where families chat day and night. No time to see, in broad daylight, Streams full of stars, like skies at night. No time to turn at handsome glance, And watch his body, all so muscular. No time to wait till his mouth can, Enrich that smile his eyes began. What a poor life if, full of hope, We have no time to play and enjoy. So what are we waiting for? Let us make time to play and enjoy. 
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Re: Poetry Club v2
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on 2010-04-25 13:19:14 |
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@ Carrot- Hahaha... No. No stealing my work (Plagiarism! XD). But thank you for thinking that my poems are that good! ^^ @ Anke- I like it! As you said, a few things could be fixed in there, but overall the poem is good. Oh and I'll probably get the grading sheet to you tomorrow (I had the great idea of asking my English teacher how she grades a poem, so I can maybe add a few things to the grading sheet I made. The only problem is I had this idea over the weekend...) @ Jo- Another good poem! Even though you said it's simple, it's really quite deep. I like it a lot  |
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on 2010-04-25 14:11:51 |
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@ Jo: Thank you for your kind words :3 The latest poem is actually about an online Romance, but I can see where you get your interpretation. As for the other poem, and your question, I will always stand by my friends when they need me, and I've only ever had one friend who bothered to return the favor... so I guess I've learned not to mind... I love your poem, it really made me stop and think about many of the moments I just let pass me by. @ Toyumi: Well when ever you finish it, I'll be waiting for it! |
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on 2010-04-25 22:16:06 |
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@Anke Thanks! Your poem is (for lack of a better word), cute. The ending made me smile.. ^^ But the beginning tugged at my heartstrings. I felt the pain of unrequited love when I read the beginning. Overall, a pretty good piece. @Jo Thank you~ I guess I really need to improve on my writing. It's been a while since I wrote.. Your poem made me went outside and enjoy the sunshine.(and got roped in a football game unwillingly) XD  Everything we do is stupid, let them laugh |
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News Flash. I found my poem book back :DD! And this is going to be a long post xD Anke: Thank you :DD Although I didn't realize the last paragraph wasn't the same as the 1st and 2nd xD I thought it was a 2 person feelings combine into one poem. Is it summer already? xD Jo: Thank you :DD Looks deep. Does it attach to some "You are still alive have fun with it"? xD Okay so I made 2 poems last night. One was an example to a friend who just gotten a broken heart. So I told him to express his feelings in something like a story or a poem. And this is the example I gave to him to be as a reference. The leaf is falling Down to the ground Looking back at the tracks The shape of her back Is still invinsible I wonder, should I chase her And flush my feelings That I've kept For so long, waiting For the right moment Would she accept me back For I am nowhere To be with... To search a new mate And move on Our memories are still attach Where it was left untouch Chained, broken Unable to be fixed From the confusion I would have taken my step Closer enough to grip her hand But she is too far And she will be gone in seconds In someone else's hand If only they would believe me more This wouldn't happened But what is been done I'll just let it go But one thing for sure I will always love you forever. And another one. The motif is clearly right there I'll let your minds fill with it And let you listen To the lonely heart That has ripped apart. Each day I'll open a book When the first page reveals I'll started to think about you Tonight I'm alone in the room Waiting the door to open And the person that walks in is you For every words that started with yours It hurts me so much That I had to keep away from my books It's quiet tonight I'm wondering what you're doing Because it's lonely without you I started to day dream And recovering those old memories Incase I've forgotten about you It shall take a long time To stop thinking about you Because you won't be here with me anymore I seek advice and had the same answers by different people I'm sure you had too because you wouldn't have moved on Only time would tell me When shall I leave From this misery This should be the best way For both of us I shall pray for your happiness I resume my reading Waiting the door to be open And the person that walks in is you /close the curtains xD!
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on 2010-04-27 16:02:38 |
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@Anke >Really?? I think it's not that good.. XD Hahaha (pessimistic). But I'll make it my official entry in the contest.. XD @Jo >Well, I'm thinking of making another one (If there's bound to be more inpirations XD) if ever.. XD But I really want to make one, problem is, the poem will sound too drastic if I were to make one without proper mindset right? Hahaha XD @Toyumi >They are good! Hahaha, too bad there's no stealing others work here.. XD Hahaha. @Holky >Hey! Your "Autumn Feelings" poem moved me!!! I almost experienced that same problem once! (makes you think I'm old eh? Hahaha) Because of you, those bitter feelings are beginning to haunt me again.. XD Peace.. ~I'll make that poem my official entry to my school's contest.. XD Hahaha. And I'm planning to make another one to be posted here in this club only.. But I have no ideas DX Maybe another love-inspired? Hahaha~
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on 2010-04-27 19:05:53 |
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can i join?this is my opening poems... We laugh together We sad together We happy together Even we are different race Different age And different religion We still live together and happiness We proud of becoming Malaysian We proud of our leaders We proud of our country One Malaysia is our inspirations   |
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Re: Poetry Club v2
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on 2010-04-28 11:27:23 |
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@ Azwan- Welcome to the club! I'm guessing that you're also a writing member with your poem, but please just use the post on the first page to make your joining official. And a nice poem too, although I don't know much about Malaysia it seems very nice from your poem! @ Holkers- Both of your poems are very good! I like Waiting more out of both of them (probably because it's more upbeat than Autumn Feelings), but again they are both good! |
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on 2010-04-28 15:46:17 |
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@ Carrot: It's natural for writers to be pessimistic about their works, take it from the readers, it's a good poem! @ Holkers: Those are both very deep and well worded poems! I can really relate to the second one in a weird kind of backwards way.... Anyway great poems! @ Azwan: As Toyumi said, please be sure to read the rules! I have added you to the writer's list... Great first poem! |
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on 2010-04-28 21:27:20 |
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@anke and toyumi oh,sorry.I forgot about that.... Nickname:Azwan Writer |
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@Holkers Waiting reminded me of something that happened in the past. Bittersweet moments. =.= Must lock 'em up again. But yeah, great poems, both of them. Very deep and well-versed. @Azwan Welcome to the club! ^^ Wrote this yesterday. I think it's still kind of unrefined, so I'll probably revise it later. There's no title for it yet.. Can't think of one for it.. ^^; Remember the broken promise that we shared? Under the burning ball of fire, we parted ways. Filled to the brim with half-truths and fragments of a lie. We waltz around the painful truth. Dancing an elaborate dance of deceit. "Then maybe it's best if we disintegrate?" I said. But deep inside, I'd love to just stay in our web of sorrow, Tangled up with each other, tied down by restrains of pain and melancholia. I stared at my phone often, these past few days. Waiting fruitlessly for a text from you that never came. Hey, maybe you've forgotten about me already. That seems possible. My heart aches with a silent longing, even when a smile adorns my face. I'm such a good actor, aren't I? Layers upon layers and layers of masks I wear, until I can't differentiate between the 'real' and 'fake' me. Maybe there wasn't a difference after all. Such sweet lies we whisper to each other. Wouldn't it be best if we stay in this web of deception forever? Broken promises and fragile dreams, together we shall lay entwined in these restrains. Such pretentious lives we lead. Everything we do is stupid, let them laugh |
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on 2010-04-29 13:31:27 (edited 2010-04-29 13:42:46)
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@ Hika-chan- Another good poem! But it's still very depressing... Put on a happy face! ^^ And I think it's time for another poem... I wrote this one right now so it might have a few errors. Anyway, here it is... Stepping and splashing On a rainy day Into the puddles That get in my way. Trudging along On a rainy day And I stop For a small stay. I look into a puddle On a rainy day And see the reflection In the walkway. I do not recognize myself On a rainy day I keep on looking For the soul that wants to play. But then On a rainy day The sun comes out And shines a ray. I look at the puddle On a rainy day And I see myself On a sunny day. What do you think? [Edit] Also, I'm tossing around some ideas for a contest since we have quite a few writing members. If it's okay with you Anke, can I get permission to start a poetry contest? I'm still thinking about the theme though... And since I'm starting this contest I can be a temporary judge too since we don't have any reading members except for Chie. Unless if Chie or anyone else wants to be the judge. Just keep in mind that the judge can't submit their own work to the contest. |
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@ Azwan: No sweat it was just a heads up :) @ Hika-Chan: Nice poem, I have a friend going through a break up at the moment, but I think he is ok, anyway your poem reminded me of his situation, almost like it was his girlfriend speaking. Eire in a way, but good, I liked it. @ Toyumi: You have permission to start a Poetry contest! I like your poem as well, it is kinda up beat which is nice! |
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on 2010-04-29 23:25:10 |
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@Toyumi XD I'm generally a happy person, but I don't know why most of the things I write turn out to be depressing... When I read your poem, I picture a chibi Naruto in a bright orange raincoat and boots playing in the drizzle, stepping in all the puddles that he could find.. Cute~~ ^^ @Anke O.o Really? That's cool, in a weird way.. XD I'm sorry to hear that.. Break ups can be really messy.. Good luck to your friend.. It must be a difficult moment for him now.. Everything we do is stupid, let them laugh |
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Carrot: It haunt others too o.o And so is for myself o.o I shall never going to do a love poem anymore! o.o A mere mistake I guess And thank you Azwan: Welcome to the club! A Malaysia Poem very nice. Toyumi: After done writing the Autumn Feelings, I've continue my work because once an idea pops-up it shall be a wasted not to wrote it down eh? And thank you Anke: Just as I'd explained to Toyumi xD Because I wanted my feelings to be told even the person that I'm letting go wouldn't know. I just had to show it to someone else instead. And thank you very much Hika-chan: xD I'm sorry if I made you guys think of your old memories I just had gone through on that day. My apologizes. That poem is what nowdays teenagers needs xD Texting, waiting that it was from her/his. Very well done. I love it. Toyumi: Is it raining over your place? xD Sounds fun playing in the puddle or the rain Who wouldn't want? It's more awesome then getting a shower xD! This is a harsh poem which I wrote for my lovely parents. I was in an angry mood at the time. You may notice it once you've read it. And I've made quite a lot poem from my anger. It's about 3 poem so far. xD! The last one would be a hard to fix, since my anger faded... I'm done! I had it enough! Of being ignored and bullied They wouldn't listen Thought they did But they never tried to understand it! They didn't know What I want to become When my studies are done They didn't know That I'm finished with arts And start making fascinated ideas About all kind of things That they never had In the history of thier family tree I shall be better And show them That I'm special than anyone else I might not like what They suggested to me But this is my future and I'm going to make it happened. Whenever they scold I wish they saw my action So it will let them know that they are wrong Time is still long I shall take my time I'll make my revenge with bitterness of 'virus' Soon... Devil-ish aye? I don't know why But my temper isn't working I used to speak up And let people hear my voice But now it's just a Silence effects of a silence night My words wouldn't reach Even gravity couldn't weight it I'm getting quieter And quieter and quieter I wish I can say my words But that would only be a waste I might not be as smart as my siblings were But my imaginations is better and bigger than theirs My only death wish for them Is to make them see when it's already happened I hope by filling my feelings Into a paper and words I would release some feelings That would block my attention I'll look foward and take the book I shall make them pay for what they've took I'm such a lonelyness child Patience is all I have Everything that made me sad That made me angry That made me worn out I only have to be patience Althought living with it is hard Getting to sit down Doing nothing Silently listening I only have patience by my side My war of speak up and act Are a waste Are a troublesome Are no good to them Patience is my best friend My heart is aching Wonder when will it stop Wonder when does it recover Wonder when will it 'die' Everyday is a patience day, for me Patience is all I have It is always by my side It is my best friend Leading my life calmer, every single day Gosh this must have been the longest post ever in my history and this thread's! My apologizes of making it longer I can't help myself but to post all the poem together so it would make some sense. And I am looking foward for the poem contest!
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@ Anke- Thank you! @ Hika-chan- I'm just wondering how Naruto pops into your head for my poem... Rofl. @ Holkers- Nice poems! I like the last two (My Best Friend and Thoughts: Come out wherever you are) better than the first, but the first is good as well. And since Anke gave me permission, I'm gonna start this contest! Seasons Contest Seasons all come and go… Nature changes as time goes on… So this contest has been created to celebrate the seasons! The poem in this contest must relate to a season (or multiple seasons) in some way. It can be through a holiday in that season, what happens in that season, or how nature changes in that season. Rules:
To enter the contest, just send me a PM.
Judging: This contest is open for judging! To be the judge, just PM me saying that you would like to be the judge. The only requirements to being judge is that you must be a member of the Gendou Poetry Club (v2). The judge can be a reading member or a writing member. Keep in mind that the judge cannot enter their own material for the contest and the judge has to use the poetry grading rubric posted (which can be found on the first post). I will become the judge if no one else wants to become one. Contest Ends: Friday, May 14th, 2010. Be creative! And have fun! |
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@ Holkers - I'm sorry about your parents... I've been blessed with wonderful ones myself :)I like all three poems, they are well worded and really give the reader a look into your mind, but I have to agree with Toyumi that the second two are better than the first, especially the last one, I love My Best Friend. Well great job!! @ Toyumi - I'm going to enter the poetry contest, I'll PM you when I finish something. |