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by chaosvegeta666
on 2011-02-15 08:45:31
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@Anke: Domo arigatou. *bows* @Komaro: I had the same thought as Anke. It was a nice poem, too. I havent read a gloomy poem in a while, awesome work. 
darkness is the vail that holds the truth. open your eyes and let the true world be seen, if you dare think you can handle it. i am the darkness within your heart. i know what you fear, and what you really are.
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Re: Poetry Club v2
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Well it's been a rather long while I since I contributed. So here's a trio of short poems. Champion in the field Through the dusk, through the dawn, where the battlelines are drawn. Let those who face the fear of death, take heart from this. I still draw breath. Assassin's verse Through the dawn, through the dusk, I leave behind the foe's broken husk. And when the fear leaves you frozen, by my hand your death is chosen. Hope My mind is gone, lost it's light, but in the shadows I found my might. The ember which still burnt bright, will keep my safe through the night.   |
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on 2011-02-16 14:27:59 |
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@ Drake- That's a cute poem, I like it. @ Komaro- I like the rhyming in your poem as well. Even though it is about death, I think it's a very good poem and I really like it. Although, unlike Drake and Anke, I don't find the poem to be overly gloomy. It has just the right touch of gloominess in it (If that makes sense). @ Fenris- Personally, I like the third poem the most. Although the first poem does remind me of Free and Dream. However, they're all too short for my taste. XD  |
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on 2011-02-17 01:24:07 (edited 2011-02-17 12:02:10)
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@ SEMPAIIII - Oooohhh, its Sempai!! WHERE HAVE YOU BEEN?? Its so great to see you again. Let me express the joy-- forget that. If I did, then suddenly the poetry club will have a hundred pages. Oh by the way sempai, I haven't heard what you think of that manga... @ Chaotic - Hauntingly Beautiful. @ Yuki - Nice writing style! Welcome to the club! @ Chocolover - Great poem! @ Riiko-sensei - You're giving me too much credit sensei! I don't think my writing can pale yours! @ Giselle - Your poem is very lovely. @ Drake - Welcome to the club! Nice poem! I'm sure it moved your girlfriend! @ Komaro - Welcome to the club! I really liked your poem. I have been wanting to write one like that myself! You're awesome! Ahaha... @ Toyumi - You stalker... (hides my private stuff) I'll stalk you first! @ Fenris - Your poems sounds cool! Although I'd prefer it if they didn't end too soon... @ All members - Hey...when I read back the old poems and posts, it made me smile and laugh and felt nostalgic. Reminded me what a nice thread this is. I'm feeling down at the moment, and you guys just made my day. Thanks Sempai for a great poetry club! And thanks you all! (this isn't a farewell speech, just a random rant) Alright boys(who ruined my harem) and girls, here's another masterpiece(really?) from yours truly! Quite a witty poem, I'd say: Title: Pretext I really, really hate you You're always putting me down Outclassing me without a sound I feel like a bumbling clown I really, really hate you All the achievements that you erect Each and every of them perfect Pales down mine to mere reject I really, really hate you The way how fast you move up I kept stumbling just to keep up Yet never once do I catch up I really, really hate you I can't keep you out of my mind Its frustrating beyond I can define Feels like screaming I am inclined I really, really hate you Everytime you're near My feelings go out of steer Compelling me to stay clear I really, really hate you Always keeping me vexed I wish I can stop this complex Of how I always think in pretext 
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@ Riiko, Toyumi, Wizard, Anke: Ty Waiting --- Waiting And waiting Nothing to do But wait For what? I don’t know Something It’ll come …Maybe Not tired? Not sick? Who wouldn’t But I can’t stop Because I waited For so long A little longer Wouldn’t hurt |
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on 2011-02-19 09:35:39 |
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Thanks guys. Honestly though, I didn't find it the least bit gloomy at all when I was writing it. I was kind of energized and at the same time listening to some happy-ish music. I think that might have been the reason why it felt weird. @Fenris: Nice trio. Short, but still says enough. @Wizard: That one I really liked. xD It makes me think about the type of person that would act that way towards someone else. @yuki: This is probably similar to what I think to myself when I'm procrastinating. =D  |
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on 2011-02-25 22:09:54 |
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Ahaha! Riiko-sensei! A pantoum! That's a Malay poetry form! Which is my mother tongue. In fact, the poems I grow up listening to are all pantoums. I'm honored that you're using it. Okay then...maybe I'll write a pantoum...when I get inspired!
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on 2011-02-25 23:45:58 |
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Pantoum? Never heard of it, but I'll give it a shot. =3 @Riiko: Honestly I liked yours a lot better than mine. It seems to flow a lot better when I read it. xD Well then, here's my less flowy bunch of words. *paste* As time stands still My heart keeps on beating Her fiery eyes forever staring I’ve never felt something so cold My heart keeps on beating The tension rips through my chest I’ve never felt something so cold The sensation swallows me whole The tension rips through my chest I feel no pain, but it burns The sensation swallows me whole I can’t endure this endless torture I feel no pain, but it burns These words linger within my mind I can’t endure this endless torture But even so, I remain speechless These words linger within my mind Her fiery eyes forever staring But even so, I remain speechless As time stands still I'm proud of it. First pantoum I've ever tried. =3 |
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on 2011-02-26 08:35:45 |
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@ Wizard- We'll just have to see about who will stalk who... And may the best stalker win! XD But as for your poem, I liked it! Witty really is a good way to describe that poem. @ Yuki- Nice poem, like what Komaro said, that's also how I feel when I procrastinate. XD @ Riiko- I've never heard of a pantoum either. Although, I'll try to make one sometime when I get in the mood to write something. It seems like it'll be a fun challenge. Also, your pantoum is really nice, I like it! @ Komaro- Your pantoum is really good too, I really can't see why you think otherwise. It's a bit longer than Riiko's, but I think that it still has good flow. In some parts it doesn't flow as well, but there aren't too many of those that I can find. Like I said before, it's really good! |
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on 2011-02-26 10:03:51 |
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@Toyumi: I didn't really say I didn't like mine. I just liked Riiko's a lot more. xD I'm still happy with mine. =3 |
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on 2011-02-27 17:33:06 |
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@ Toyumi - May the best stalker win! (This sounds weird...ahaha...) @ Komaro - A great first pantoum Komaro! It sounds lovely! @ Riiko-sensei - I liked your pantoum Sensei! Now behold the literary prowess of one who grows up with pantoums! (sorry didn't mean to sound cocky ahaha...actually I'm not even confident on this one) Title: Sleepless Night Twilight draws near, As I light the campfire Light envelops my world Frost accompanies my breath As I light the campfire On this sleepless night Frost accompanies my breath I recall memories of warmth On this sleepless night Playing the harmonica I recall memories of warmth Tears cascading down my cheeks Playing the harmonica Recalling days of joy Tears cascading down my cheeks Bringing warmth to my heart Recalling days of joy Light envelops my world Bringing warmth to my heart Twilight draws near
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on 2011-03-09 22:16:36 |
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@Wizard: Awesome pantoum Wizard. It felt somewhat depressing, but it's all good. =D @Riiko: Thanks. It's an interesting poem style. At least I have something new I can use whenever I'm not to busy or lazy to write more. xD And here's something I just decided to make at random when I finally finished my research paper just now. A Moment of Happiness Fingers like lightning Mind like a fire My effort is frightening My body is tired A thousand words per minute The world's best Like hell do I know what's in it It's almost time to rest Ink on paper, black as coal Pages of unknown text Silver staple binds, it's now a whole My relaxation is what comes next My eyes slam shut My dreams begin But soon it was cut So sad, I felt like win The sunlight shines down Burning the bed where I lay The mirror's where I see my frown Another assignment is due next day |
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on 2011-03-11 08:42:40 |
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@ Wizard - that poem reminds me of a novel I just finished reading called "Of Mice and Men." I could see the character George doing that after the novel ends... Anyway it seems sad and lonely. I hope that doesn't mean that you are lonely. @ Komaro / Riiko - Yes homework... I'm going to be so glad when my college level clases are over. My life will come back and I'll be able to be on here more often... I love that poem... I'm about ready to copy it onto my homework folder just so I know I'm not the only one working myself to death. The disaster in Japan has inspired me, I hope this isn't too depressing. Falling To Pieces The floodwaters are coming in, pushing down the walls that contain my life. The world is falling to pieces, shouts of agony ring from the streets. My life has come to nothing more than running, running for higher ground. The walls will fall, and the city will crumble. I must keep my spirits up, and help my friends believe, that we can keep going. FIGHTING! The waters are coming, and they carry with them rubble and debris, the ashes of another life, the remains of something that will never be the same, but we will always keep going. Our legs will run and run foreword, running for the high ground.  |
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on 2011-03-11 17:55:36 |
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@ Anke- I don't find that poem depressing, but rather, inspiring, and optimistic too. I really like it, it has that sense of hope in the midst of the tragedy. @ Komaro- I love that poem! It sounds exactly like me with all of my English papers! (Whether that's a good thing or not, I don't know.) XD @ Wizard- That's a very nice pantoum! I have some really tough competition when I get a chance to make a pantoum of my own. Although that might not be for awhile... >.> |
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... o.o So many awesome poems by so many awesome people! For me, am not writing anymore :c I keep saying if I did any I'll post but unfortunately there's none Dx I could contribute my old old poems then. Friendship is nothing but Pain Laughter Sadness and sorrow If friendship is like milk and honey everyone will be honey (:3) :3
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on 2011-03-23 13:02:01 |
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@ Riiko- I think Ich just might have posted the picture in the wrong thread. XD As for your poem, it's very nice! I think that the second stanza doesn't flow as nicely as the rest of the poem, but it's still good! @ Holkers- That poem is quite a cute poem, although it's way too short for my taste. Well, I hope nobody's looking forward to me posting a poem here sometime soon, because I don't any inspiration for one these days. I have been writing a bit more recently, although it's in the form of a few short stories, and not poetry. >.> And did someone mention 'Of Mice and Men' a few posts ago? I just finished reading that for English. I liked it a lot, even though it did have a sad ending (It's actually what has inspired me to get back to writing short stories recently). |
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Hey guys! It's the National Poetry Month! Should we do our first poetry contest? I wonder. Anyhow, just wanna share what I've discovered :D! Good work guys!
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on 2011-04-06 11:32:09 |
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@ Holkers- We've already had a contest here before, it was sometime last year. So another contest wouldn't be our first one. XD But having another poetry contest would be nice, it might spark some more activity in the club. I know that I'd participate in a contest if we ended up having one. I have a few things going on with school and whatnot that's kind of preventing me from holding a contest, but like I said I'll definitely participate in one if it pops up. |
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on 2011-04-06 19:07:44 |
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Haven't got the time to write anything for a while, but that while has passed. No more insane workload preventing me from writing. The music I've been recently listening to (*cough*supercell*cough*) is giving me some inspiration too. Maybe I'll think of something eventually. @Anke: Depressing indeed... Well, maybe just about half-depressing. The 2nd stanza really evened it out for me. Mother nature is cruel. Japan is tough. @Holkers: Quite short. I say friendship is more like milk. It helps people grow. (Lol) @Riiko: Nice poem. It's a lot better than anything I make when I'm taking a bus, considering that if I tried writing or doing anything that required some thought I'd probably fall asleep and wake up in the middle of nowhere. xD @Toyumi: If you're really in need of poetry inspiration, the key is to force someone to inspire you. Pick a random man/woman/kid/other off the street and say something like "INSPIRREE MEE TO WRITE POETRY!!" xD I would do that... just for randomness sakes if I wanted inspiration. You never know. It could actually inspire you... maybe... =3 And a poetry contest sounds nice. It'll be the first one for ME here. xD |
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on 2011-04-14 20:32:14 |
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Looking good everyone, really amazing poems... Right now, I've kind of be inspired by the taboo and unspoken, how certain things are never said and others just adamantly avoided... They're things that happen every day though, and they're human lives that are being taken, ruined and crushed... and I wrote a poem about it so... here it is. Untold Realities: A child peers out a window with blackened eyes, Focusing overhead at the darkened skies. Wondering why each night his father beats him, He worries that his life shall forever be very grim. Years later a woman stands at his tombstone and carries on a one sided strife, Her hateful words yelled at the grave of her lover that took his life. She can’t understand why he would do something that would make so many cry, “Please,†She weeps, “I just want to know why...†Months after, she sits in the hospital with cheeks stained with tears. Something she never anticipated has fulfilled her greatest fears, The child that she carried is gone and so is the last shred of her love that she had... The man that had taken his life had been the dad. With everything slipping from her hands she wonders if things will forever be so grim, Her life, her will to live, and the light that used to sparkle in her eye is growing dim... She feels as though there is no reason to carry on and only months after his death, She follows in footsteps that she questioned as she took her own last breath. Such a story of misery and pain that is led by the broken, Such tragedy happens in our world but it goes unspoken... The reality is one that nobody wants to face nor admit and so, Untold and forgotten does the story go.  |