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Re: Poetry Club v2
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on 2010-04-19 12:06:43 (edited 2010-04-19 12:12:01)
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@ Anke- So I can really get the job of welcoming committee? (I've always wanted a job like that... It would be fun. ^^) @ Jo- Thank you! I like your newest poem too. It's really... Deep (couldn't think of a word rofl). And yeah, the writing type clubs are a bit slow (I've noticed not many people are seriously into this kind of stuff). But that's alright (More for the rest of us!). And a poem a week is a pretty good pace (I can only manage to get a poem about every 1 to 3 weeks, depending on the length of it. My latest one took about 2 weeks for me to be happy with it.). Edit So how about a poetry related topic to discuss? (lol I thought about starting this after I made my original post). So here's the topic: How long does it take you to write a poem? (The final product of the poem.) My answer is in my reply to Jo (which, as I said, is about 1 to 3 weeks. It takes so long for me because I write only when I have free time to do so).  |
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Re: Poetry Club v2
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on 2010-04-19 13:53:19 |
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@ Toyumi - Sure I'll put it in the first post if you'd like me to!!! @ Jo - Oooo that poem is really good!!! I can relate, because I'm always looking out for my friends, but it seems none of them really look out for me, side for maybe my friend on here, Chaotic... As for my poetry turn out rate... I can crank out 3-4 a week if I have the inspiration for them... My story rate is another story all together... Shattered on the Floor My head is bowed and I'm staring at the floor from my perch atop my bed my toes curling around the edge. Spread across my pink shag klarpit lay so many pieces of what was once a bigger image. How do they fit together when they are all so unalike? Some of them are changing shape right before my eyes. So many places so many faces all broken up and tossed to the dirt. The rounded pieces dont fit the hallow spaces where they belong and the outline of this great mystery never stays the same. Why do none of the pieces fit when I know they used to. How can I ever finish this impossible puzzle? My mind is spinning my brian hurts bad I narrow my eyes in sadness and confusion could I be going blind? There in that mess of broken pictures is an image of that perfect smile and there is you hand in mine. but then the puzzle changes the pieces multiply. Another smile stands next to yours a smile that is not mine. My heart jumps into my mouth and I slide down off my bed I sit there kneeling next to the thoughts that are in my head. Frantically I run my hands across the shattered picture and toss pieces about the floor as I try to fit your face next to mine, but there are pieces that I just cannot find. Throwing my head back, I scream aloud in pain as realization comes crashing down on me. All this time it was my heart spread out there on the floor vulnerable, broken wishing it could be yours once again. Some of you guys from the writer's club will probably recognize this one...  |
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Re: Poetry Club v2
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on 2010-04-19 18:46:11 |
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GUYS! I'm working on a "song" type of poem and I think I'll have it posted in here a few days from now. I would like y'all to rate that poem from 1-10 with 1 being the lowest score ok? No decimals, since I'll be using that same poem in our Literature Contest, to see who is the best Literature student there is on our school.. XD Hope I win! Just wait for my poem! [And that would be my very first poem to be submitted here] 
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Re: Poetry Club v2
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on 2010-04-19 20:31:28 |
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@ Carrot - I can't wait to read it, and I'm going to wish you an early good luck! |
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Re: Poetry Club v2
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on 2010-04-20 01:36:14 |
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Oh Anke, I wish you will rate it nee? :D
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Re: Poetry Club v2
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on 2010-04-20 11:42:15 |
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@ Anke- I remember it! It's such a great poem, it's good that you posted it here too! And if you want to put the topic in the first post, that would be okay. Maybe there can be a "Topic" area (to make it separate from the announcements. I'm still wondering how you get the picture and link to work. When ever I try putting the image in between the link and click on it to try it out, it says there's a link error. But this is getting off topic...). @ Carrot- A literary contest? That sounds so awesome! (My school never does any fun stuff like that... They're all sports centered XD) And when you post it I wouldn't mind rating it. Carrot's post actually gives me a good idea too. Maybe once in awhile we can have themed poetry contests. We probably need a few more members (so we can get a lot of entries even if some people can't enter a poem), but other than that it could be fun! (This is giving me ideas already...) I could work up a judging sheet, to be based on things like grammar, the feeling of the poem, relation to topic, symbolism, etc. |
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Re: Poetry Club v2
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on 2010-04-20 15:45:56 |
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@ Carrot- I will rate it!!! @ Toyumi - Great ideas, yes we need a few more members before we do a contest, and we'll also need to think about prizes. It would be fun though!!! Anyway I added a few sections to the main page tell me what you think! |
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Re: Poetry Club v2
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on 2010-04-20 16:16:34 (edited 2010-04-20 16:48:41)
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GUYS! Here it is! I was so inspired that I went to finish this in a jiffy! Hahaha, but I hope y'all like this.. "What do you like so much about me?" A question that's been asked so suddenly. SO for now, to me, the world has been halted, Only to look at the eyes of that friend. A smile that looks like a flowering bud, Even seeing it everyday isn't enough. Not to mention that amazing body, That all women have been dreaming for eternity. Then moving on, to the internal you, A very cool demeanor is what rules through. But there's more to you that I can't describe properly. Those are still a mystery, so please forgive me. While being seen by the others, you pretend to be strong, So that those nearly-falling tears won't be shown. And then, we both became silent as we walk away, It's exactly that, why I kept looking astray. Sadness and pain are just life's package deal, Just hold onto me, and we'll walk through the ordeal. Whenever you're afraid, remember I'm still here, Even if the world around us will disappear. A common phrase like; "I love you" takes on a wonderful new meaning, The moment I utter them to you, you kept saying; "I hate you" But that's the opposite of what you feel, I knew it since, and I wouldn't even kneel. After that, it's just like any other day, Kids crowding other kids for them to play. The only difference is now, as we walk their way, We held hands, walk side by side, with no dismay. >Now, I think my more previous ones are better than this, but I hope this sounds good in your ears. XD @Toyumi >I agree, let's have that contest ASAP! XD Too bad were kinds short-manned when it comes to members.. DX But I hope there'll be one! XD @Anke >Here it goes! Hope you like it! XD
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Re: Poetry Club v2
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on 2010-04-21 11:29:34 |
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@ Carrot- Well, it has a good rhythm to it... Although the theme of the poem is kind of obvious (being love). Try to make it a bit more hidden, make it a poem that others really have to think about, and it can give some sort of a life lesson. But other than that, everything else looks good. Although, that one line that ends with meaning, and the one after that ends with saying, it just doesn't seem to flow right (but that could just be me!). Also, is the poem called "Untitled", or is it untitled? (The title doesn't really matter, I just want to know.) Overall, I'd give it a 8/10. @ Anke- For prizes, I was thinking of having some sort of banner for the winner to put on their profile. Make it pretty and stuff, and there could be a different banner for each contest (depending on the theme of the contest). And there could be 2nd and 3rd place banners too if we get a lot of interest in the contest. I would be willing to help out with doing this. |
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on 2010-04-21 15:38:29 |
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wow... poetry club ^__^ I want to join! ^_^ Nick: shizue  |
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on 2010-04-21 16:03:48 |
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Woohoo! WIll that make me win Toyumi? :D Hahaha Hhmm.. let's see, it's still "untitled". I don't have nice titles in mind to name it sadly.. DX @Shizue >Hello there, I guess the people here will say this; "Please read the very post." Bwahaha! I did my senpai works! XD
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on 2010-04-21 20:11:20 |
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Mind if I join? Nickname : Hika-chan I'll be a writer, yeah?  Everything we do is stupid, let them laugh |
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WOW. We're getting a huge awesome members~! Now now, time for replying and reading :3 Chie: Welcome :D Jo: welcome :D Toyumi: Lol huge imagination head you got there xD Thank you :D I did that when it was about Tsunami? I don't really remember... Carrot: Welcome! :D Anke: thank you very much. I actually added a few, hmm how do you say, Malay's poem kindda of way. Yeah traditional. Jo: Thanks. ooo deep thoughts on that poem. Hope you find the exit towards the maze you created! xD Anke: Is that a tragic romance relationship or what? Sounds sad... hmm... very sad. If only there's a "like" in that post I would have click it. Carrot: A SONG POEM?! ooooooo, I can't wait for it! I love those kind of things! Love eeeeeeeeeet. That the one kind of poem I love to read and create! I hope you won the contest :D Aaa, I'm a little bit late to say that xD Shizue: Welcome! Hika-chan: Welcome :D! So I've bump into the first page before posting this. And realize there would be a poetry contest soon. And I'm agree on Toyumi's prizes suggestion. Well, sorry there would be no poem for this post. I... kindda... forget where have I put my poetry book. So, I shall post one on the next post. Which are my oldies ones since I can't make much poems these days. When I do, I'll make sure I share with you.
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Re: Poetry Club v2
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on 2010-04-22 12:17:04 (edited 2010-04-22 12:17:22)
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@ Shizue & Hika-chan- Welcome to the Poetry Club! /throws confetti Nice to have you here with us! And are you both new writers? (Shizue you didn't specify if you will be a writer or a reader so please just let us know!) @ Carrot- Well I think you will be able to win! (Just make up a title for it sometime alright? Rofl) @ Holkers- "When I do, I'll make sure I share with you." I was reading that last line of your latest post and was thinking Is that supposed to be it's own little poem? Rofl nice rhyming (And the rhyming fits since it's the poetry club!) @ Anke- I'm almost done with a judge's scoring sheet, and I'll probably post it sometime this weekend. If it's alright with you, I'm gonna post it so everyone will know what to look out for when writing their poems (because I will already know what the sheet is about, and then you will too, along with whoever the judge is, so I think it will make things fair if everyone knows what they're being graded on). |
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Re: Poetry Club v2
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on 2010-04-22 14:53:39 |
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@ Toyumi - Ok!!! I'd be happy to help with the banners too!! I have photo shop until I have to give up my school computer! Anyway I was thinking along the same lines, so that's a good thing! @ Carrot - Beautiful poem!! It's is well worded and really has a nice rhythm to it! I know Toyumi said to make the meaning more hidden, the only tip I have for that is to use a little more symbolism. It's not really necessary, but like she said it will leave the reader thinking about it and you want to always make an impression on the judges!!! I give it a 9/10! @ Shzune and Hika-Chan: Welcome!!! I'm so glad to have you!!! Hika-chan I have added you to the front page under the writers, feel free to post your poems when ever you'd like. Shizune I'm going to assume you'll be a writer, but if you let me know other wise I'll switch it up for you! @Holkers: Thank you and you're welcome!!! @ Toyumi again: If you could PM me the judging sheet I'll put a link to it on the front page and hid it as a spoiler, that way it won't take up so much space. Ok? @ All: I need more readers so I can have a panel of judges!!!! will edit and put in the poem I'm working on laterz :3 |
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Re: Poetry Club v2
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on 2010-04-22 17:14:14 |
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@Toyumi >Hm? Hahaha, I thought of making another one though.. XD You know why I don't like to make a poem that will make others think hard? (Which I really want to.) It's because if I make too much metaphors, the teachers and other students will not understand what I have in mind and what I am trying to express.. You know those kinds of misunderstanding? o.O But I'll try anyway.. XD Thanks. @Anke >Maybe I'll try to remake the poem a little bit? Hahaha. I really can't make up a great title that will have a ring on it.. DX Hahaha. @Holkers >Woohoo Holkers! Hahaha, read my poem and rate it if you may?
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@Holkers, Toyumi & Anke Thanks! ^^ Ah, first poem. Read and review, yeah? Heartbreak is like a small death. Shattered love, The small pieces embedded into the heart, Ripping it apart slowly, agonizingly. "It's better to be loved than to never love at all" A statement by an ignorant. Love is like a two-edged sword. It leaves a deep impression and then cuts you. Love can be deep and shallow at the same time. Love is complex. A mixture of both exhilaration and pain. Everything we do is stupid, let them laugh |
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Re: Poetry Club v2
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on 2010-04-23 11:56:29 |
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@ Anke- No problem I can PM it (and putting it on the first post is a better idea). Although I use Gimp instead of Photoshop, they're basically the same sort of thing, so as I said before I can help out with banners. And if it's not too much trouble, could you change my avy on the front page to the one I'm currently using? (I'm gonna be using this set for a long time, so you don't have to worry about changing it after this one!) @ Carrot- Yeah, but if you make it just right so the theme is expressed, but it's a bit more hidden, then it should be easy to find if someone is looking for it... I don't really make much sense with this, but I think that my poem Welcome to the Fantasy World does a good job with hidden themes (I made it just for that purpose!). @ Hika-chan- Nice poem! It's deep, and kind of depressing too, but I like it. |
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on 2010-04-24 05:54:31 |
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@Toyumi Thanks~ Ah, yeah, it is kinda depressing.. Almost everything that I write turns out dark and twisted.. ^^; Everything we do is stupid, let them laugh |
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Gosh what a tiring day. Alright reply time! Toyumi: ahahaha xD True true. I even repeat that sentences after I've submit it. And I was like "wow. awesome holkers well done" xD! Anke: :3 Your pleasure Carrot: Very well. I would rate it 9 over 5.. I mean 10. /cough. Hika-chan: Your very welcome. A love poem. An evil love poem. A hearbreak love poem. I can't decide xD! Love it! Well done! Keep up the good work :D Oh man don't you just wanna meet your old buddies in your primary school? I had a great reunion last night! And this is my first ever poem of 2010 I've made. It's contribute to my friends who attend on the event! Unable to hold our childish act So strong, it'll drift us apart And let us act more likely an adult. Our fond memories will be kept For they are the ones we're able to get intouch to discuss How wild we were Like a calf running in all directions Searching for it's mother to be fed. Our connections, our communications Will always be the same It will never be bored To discuss the same thing over and over again. We share our informations So we can find someone to lean on their shoulder, their ears Make them listen What is your opinion. Once it ends, it might never be the same, But these networking sosial sites, Will always be our partners To connect us again. We keep the animations In high technology devices To share it, Among us So it shall stay in our life. My dear friends, I'm sorry to say Farewell for we might never see again 'til the next gathering would let me stay longer... So we can have great memories Just like the older days. I can't think of a title. A wise friend use to told me leave the title and start with your ideas. So yeah xD Would love to hear your comments :3
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