Aetheria Story ( Start - Open)
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After a while, i finally decided to make a comeback. And this is my new story. This is not actually a completely new RP. Because I’m still lacking of time a while ago, i created this using some RP material from some RP i’ve been going through (mostly Wald Marchen and Tales of Arcania). So this RP credited to Valkryja, Tales of Arcania, Wald Marchen, and EX-istence. The setting also inspired from Final Fantasy VIII and Final Fantasy X
Yay, bisa ngotak atik halaman depan RP Master.. Hehehehehe.. XD Kapan2 wa otak atik yg laennya aah.. XP BASIC STORY In a world called Aetheria, a world which has an advance technology using the energy of rune as the energy source. An energy which come from the world, exist everywhere but only one material could store it so that it can be used. Edelstein. A mysterious rare ore in shape of crystal. Mana filled everything in this world, but Edelstein is an exception. It’s empty and with certain process, it can be filled up with various kind of mana and used in various ways. But, Edelstein is not the only exception. An anomaly happened 50 years ago and continue until now. A very few number of childs born without mana inside their body and as the subtitute of the mana which should have filled them, a mysterious being is created inside them, provide those childs with an enormous mana energy and ability to call those mysterious being sleeping inside them using a certain catalyst. Those childs were called Meister and their mysterious guardians were called Seele. Aetheria divided into 3 nation; Brandstelle Empire, which lay on the south side of Aetheria’s mainland, stand firm on the harsh Lithia desert and tough mountain of immeldir also the one who owned all of Omenia and West Galatea forest. An empire with one absolute king, Lord Archard Von Altagra which lead a very strong military force and has an advance industrial technology and military industry. Kingdom of Erden, the biggest nation among the three nations, with a vast territory both on mainland and sea stand above the other three nations. A kingdom which leads by a young princess named Edelia Ein Aurea and a group of noblemen called Izentia committee. It is a nation with the most advance civilization technology and strong military force also the largest number of population. Legna Nation a place which lay on the Iceland and owned half of the Galatea forest and mount Aurea as their stronghold and defensive wall. They’re divided into a number of tribes which lived in their own village or town. Lead by a mysterious little kid named Himmel Meer Staude, the one who were called with name ‘Serpent of Lore’ because he’s been there with every Legna’s leader and now have to take that responsibility because the previous leader died in war. They owned the most of the undiscovered Edelstein mine but they lived in traditional way with strong cultural influence which make them use those resources wisely. Now, the condition between those nations was unstable. War can break anytime with just a flick of fire. They’re warring over territory and mostly Edelstein. But, at the same time, another chaos appeared in front of them, a mysterious monster called Irregular invaded their city and town, destroying their villages and kill everyone with no mercy. No one know where they come from. They suddenly appeared 10 years ago when the big war started. Each of the nations suspect others as the one who pulling strings behind those invasion. And the condition worsen. DESCRIPTION Meister Those who born without mana filled inside them, as the substitution, a Seele appeared inside them. Meisters were slightly physically stronger and stronger in term of mana energy than normal human. They can use rune weapon and rune stone more optimal than normal human and some has ability to refill a rune stone with a certain kind or element of mana. But Meister has to bear discrimination from other people; they isolate them and consider them damned. Each of them has a certain symbol on their body. Seele It’s a mysterious existence which exits as the substitute for Meisters mana energy which should have been inside them since they’re born. They have their own personality and trait also a certain ability and weapon. In order to be summoned out of their Meister’s body, a specific catalyst is required, but the catalyst has to be something which doesn’t come from The Meister’s body. Seele also gave their Meister a slight of their ability while not summoned and will grow stronger when they’re summoned. And when summoned, their Meister also got a certain weapon to protect themselves. There still a lot of mystery about Seele and Meister, a few Seele has ability to speak but they don’t have knowledge of their origins, their memory begin when they’re born along with their Meister. Rules : - Meister is slightly physically stronger than normal human. It’s not like they can jump over a building, but they jump higher, can lift heavier things, move slightly faster, and slightly better sense. Remember, slightly. - Meister is has stronger mana energy, a rune stone in Meister hand will produce more powerful magic than normal human can produce. - Meister got a slight of their Seele’s ability. - Meister got a certain weapon when their Seele were being summoned but it’s not a super power weapon. It’s just a weapon which can use a certain level of their Seele’s ability. - Meister has a symbol on their body for their Seele. - Seele has a specific ability. You can’t make your Seele has an ability to control fire, but you can make your Seele has an ability to produce fire from their body and use it to attack by shooting fire or throwing fire balls. And in this case the Meister which got a slight ability may has ability to flick a fire or produce a small amount of fire or produce heat. - Seele and Meister were connected. If The Seele was hurt, The Meister will feel it too. - When Seele is die, they’ll come back into their Meister’s body. And need some time till it fully recovered. But it can be summoned even when it’s not completely recovered as the consequence, it’ll be much weaker than usual. - The stronger their Seele, more energy needed and harder catalyst needed in order to summon it and maintain their existence. - Seele which can speak tend to be weaker than those which can’t in term of fighting power because as the substitute of their power, they got intelligence. - The catalyst to summon Seele has to be specific and not coming from The Meister’s body nor something which exist everywhere. For example, you can’t use earth nor air / wind as catalyst. Instead of earth, you may use a certain amount or shape of stone as catalyst. You can’t use blood, breath, sweat, nor those which come from Meister body. - Need one / certain amount of catalyst to summon Seele once. The catalyst used for summoning will disappear as soon as The Seele were summoned. - Catalyst doesn’t have to really have relation to your Seele’s element, shape or ability. Irregular A mysterious monster shaped like a black slime with white plain mask. No one know where they’re come from, how and why. But they’re appeared and attacked cities, towns and villages since 10 years ago. They firstly look like a black slime, but they’ll eventually take shape of anything they ate. And grow stronger as they eat more. They also attack mining site and travelling merchant. All cities, towns and villages is stay alert to anticipate Irregular attack. Brandstelle Empire Geographic : 50% deserts and plains - 10% forests – 10% water (river and sea) – 20% mountains and hills Capital : Isara Big cities : Melliza (mine) – Lyod (mine) – Genas (mine) – Ysk (military base and airport) Cities and towns : Oriza – Uruk (seaport) – Styr – Elk – Ildur – Pourt - Ieren Villages : Taile – Fritz – Gal Citizen Characteristic : Slightly darker skin colour, red coloured eyes, darker hair colour. Civilization : Mostly industrial town and city, advance technology, airship technology and runic weapon, dominated by military influence, most of the citizens work as a miner, merchant, greenhouse farmer, hunter, and worker at factories. Kingdom of Erden Geographic : 30% forests and plains - 10% mountains and hills – 40% water (river, sea, and lake) – 10% deserts – 10% arctic areas Capital : Izentia Big cities : Ihelm (mine) – Bard (mine) – Inis (mine) – Maruka (mine) – Kilik (mine) – Ourel –Issle (seaport, airport, central market area) – Lime (military base) Cities and towns : Winry – Deur (mine) – Nina (seaport) – Heirya – Islaneir – Yealk – Auris – Indes – Yurik - Tieur Villages : Ouka – Tannis – Burdin – Eisk – Hourin – Vini Citizen Characteristic : Green coloured eyes Civilization : A very advance technology civilization, advance airship and runic weapon technology, mostly an agricultural town and city, has an advance research center which doing research on rune and mana, most of the citizens work as farmer, merchant, fisherman, etc. Legna Nation Geographic : 50% forests – 20% mountains and hills – 20% arctic areas – 10% water (river and sea) Capital : Gizelle Ardai Big cities : Aeldur (mine) – Virid (mine) – Goulin (mine) – Faust (mine) – Ikfes (mine) – Airial (mine and seaport) Cities and Town : Kaliva (sacred shrine) Villages : Jade – Creid – Aedel – Vuril (and other unnamed villages located around big cities and capital) Citizen Characteristic : Blue colored eyes, , brighter skin color, mostly brighter hair color Civilization : A strong cultural influence, has advance technology city but they mostly lived traditionally and use minimum amount of their technology, most of the citizens work as farmer, hunter, merchant, and fisherman. Technology Condition Aetheria has an advance technology but instead of fosil fuel, they use mana as the fuel and energy source and to collect and use mana, they use Edelstein and build various kind of engine and machine to use it. Today is a industrial era when technology is being invented stimulously. Electricity, light, television, radio, exist, but still using electricity which produced using Rune generator. But television and radio can only recieve a broadcast come from inside the city. Car exist but rarely because expensive and it cost money to refill the mana which serve as its fuel. People still using horse, caravan, motorcycle, airship, ship, or train which run through several big cities. Car can rarely be used to travel far enough because only few car type which could carry a large number of mana fuel with them, mostly military car. Motorcycle can run far enough because it’s need less energy but still expensive for normal people. Rune stone is a stone made of Edelstein which can store a certain amount of mana with certain element. It can be release by channeling the user mana with the stored mana and produce various magic depend on what kind of mana and spell stored there. Rune gun, rarely exist, it’s a gun which use Edelstein bullet to shoot elemental bullet, but it’s not too strong since the size is small, mostly owned by a certain military division. Rune weapon is a weapon which using Edelstein to strengthen them by storing a certain type, element and amount of mana into it, but it’ll depleted as it’s used and has to be refilled. Rune stone can only be used once after used, it has to be refilled with certain process before it can be used again. Concept of Magic In this world, human can’t use magic. They have mana inside them but they can’t let it out in a concrete form. Human mana has neutral element, it’s purely energy. So in order to make use of those energy, they need other mana which were not owned by them. Rune stone exist as the solution. They insert a certain elemental mana into Edelstein along with a certain command to those mana. And by channeling their mana into rune stone, they can triggered a phenomenon and allow the mana stored inside rune stone to active and let the elemental mana out according to the command inserted along with it (example : as fire ball, ice lance, etc). But the ammount of mana stored inside rune stone depend on the size and quality, especially size. A normal size rune stone (3 x 5 cm) can’t contain a large ammount of mana it can only contain a normal magic such as fire ball, ice lance, etc and can shoot for about 3 or 5 shoot. RP RULES - Normal Gendou Rules. - No god-mode or power-playing. We're all talented writers here. please consider when you can win and when you have to lose. - Quality posts, be creative, which means avoid one-liners. I'm not too strict with language use, as long as everyone can understand your writing that's enough - No killing other player's character without their permission and my permission. - Be realistic and use your imagination, you need to know how to react in your role, and you’re not a perfect being. - You can take more than 1 character, and feel free to create any number of minor characters. But, take your own risk and be responsible to your own character. - Submit me any ideas you have or PM me about anything you want to ask. I also accept any critic and comment or even a protest. - Tell us if you can’t post for some period or want to quit. - Romance always welcome, but consider your condition and don’t ignoring other player (unless they caused some trouble). - Have fun. That's RP all about right! CHARACTER SHEET you can be Meister or normal human, soldier or citizen. Name : (if you have title or nickname, write after your name using “titleâ€) Gender : Age : (be reasonable) Job : (choose any normal works for your character) Nationality : (choose where are you come from, Brandstelle, Erden or Legna) Side : (choose which side are you now, Brandstelle, Erden, Legna, or neutral) Weapon of choice : (choose a weapon which you usually use, but be reasonable) Ability : (describe an ability obtained from your Seele, must be similar but much weaker) Bio : (be creative, unclear or mysterious bio is ok, but be reasonable) (for Meister) Seele Name : Title / Nickname : Element : (choose one of five element, fire, water (or Ice), wind, earth, thunder) Catalyst : (be specific and follow the rules) Ability : (be specific and not too overkill. Follow the rules) Build in Weapon : (a weapon held or owned by your Seele) Weapon Provided : (a weapon which provided when Seele summoned, it’s optional) Extra : (add any extra information about your Seele) Symbol Location : (where your symbol located) Appearancel and Symbol : (add your character, Seele and other extra pic like your weapon if needed) CHARACTER LIST (based on Nationality) Brandstelle Empire - Airi Alvinia [Kyoshiro] - Heinkel Bertran [Kyokubane] - Leah Wilburn [Toyumi] - Karlus Heinze Fraisk [Rastya] - Akie Shouichiro [Red] Kingdom of Erden - Alphonsine Ashura [Ashura] - Theresa Sylva Clarissa [Henrietta] - Hayle Kurieltze [Ugo] - Cliff T. Winston [Renma] Legna Nation - Rena Renetta Hildergarderia [Kyuzuryu] - Avaron Saitou [Shae] - Fenris [Fenris] - Kenji Kurayami [Kenji] - Zenki Meer Staude [Inx] - Shuri Sagami [Inx] Name : Airi Alvinia “Books Eater†Gender : Female Age : 19 Job : Airship Engineer Nationality : Brandstelle Side : Brandstelle Weapon of choice : Monkey wrench Ability : produce a light electric current through her body (works when she touch the target or the target is very close to her) Bio : A genius mechanic which being recruited by military when she’s 10 years old. Her town were completely destroyed by Irregular when ‘The First Invasion’ occurred, no one survived except her who at that time is being playing outside the town. She had a photographic memory which makes her able to remember everything she had seen and she also understand a lot about runic engine thanks to the education she got in The Capital University of Isara. She’s being taken by a military airship engineer, Edward Authorian, and as his recommendation, she got a position along with him as an engineer. She’s a passive and introvert girl caused by her traumatic past seeing her own town and her relatives being slaughtered by Irregulars. She seldom show smile, but deep inside, she’s a kind and cheerful girl. She has known that she’s a Meister since she’s 5 and able to control Arbalest, but somehow, she lost his control after that tragedy. Because of that, she always try to avoid fire source although it’s difficult since her work often involving the use of fire. She’s trained with swordsmanship when she’s entering the military but can’t fully mastered it because she doesn’t really like swords, as the substitute, she use her big monkey wrench as sword to protect herself but unfortunately she’s not too good at using rune stone. Airi was famous because she along with some other engineer invented a lot kind of Airship technology for public use and military use. She’s been called “Books Eater†since then because she could remember every single book she read once. Now, she’s also works at an Airship workshop owned by Edward at Isara. Seele Name : Arbalest Gender : Male Title / Nickname : Metal Raider / Al Element :, Thunder Catalyst : Source of fire within Meister reach Ability : Produce a very strong electromagnetic field around him Build in Weapon : Heavy cannon, heavy machine gun, combat knife (all located on his left hand) Weapon Provided : - Extra : Airi can’t completely control Arbalest nor able to fully summon him. She can only materialized upper half of his body or some body parts of him. He often goes berserk and exhaust Airi’s energy. Also it’s often come out whenever the requirement are fulfilled (catalyst exist) in a certain emotional condition of Airi. 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Name : Alphonsine Ashura "Al"
Gender : Male Age : 20 Job : Miner Nationality : Kingdom of Erden Side : Kingdom of Erden Weapon of choice : - Ability : - Bio : I am not an important person nor a certain hero from the battlefield. I am just a normal miner from Deur Town. My family have they own edelstein mine in the corner of Deur and usually sells its raw ores to Ourel. It's not a big mine, so I think we don't need to discuss any further about it. About my past, I don't have anything to share, because it's only filled by normal and peaceful life. As well as my past, there is nothing special about my personality. Besides, I am not a type person who can judge myself. (Hhh.. In the end, I can't write something interesting about me =__=a) [-Alphonsine A-] Bener2 kaya ngga niat bikin chara nih wa.. =__=a Appearance : Coming soon... |
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impressive comeback, i've been waiting for you and your detail and throughout RP. And in instant, i've create this. tell me if something wrong or not comfortable. Name : Theresa Sylva Clarissa “Pinocchio†Gender : Female Age : 20 Job : 2nd Squad Commander Nationality : Erden Side : Erden Weapon of choice : Lance and Fist Ability : Super human strength (in term of power and it’s not really a super power, just stronger than normal Meister) Bio : Theresa was an orphan who lived on a harsh street of Capital City Izentia. She used to steal, fight and do a lot kind of dirty job to survive. The first time she know her true identity as Meister was also the first time she take humans lives. When she’s 6 years old, she killed 5 guards which trying to get rid of her and other loiterer from Izentia inner wall. That’s the first time she summoned Aida. But instead of being captured as a murderer, she’s being taken in into House of Brundhilde, a noble family which has a quite important position in izentia committee. She treated very special and in no time, she’s able to obtain a position as the 2nd squad commander. But she already understands what House of Brundhilde wanted. They want a rare Meister inside their family, someone who can bring them to higher position in the committee and government, someone feared by others. Although she has already known about it, she keep silent and do as they want. Her intention is to change Izentia from inside. Bring more prosperity to Izentia so that her friends on streets would have a better live. She’s being hated by other squad commander and higher ups, because of her behaviour which often disobey their order but can’t really lay a finger on her because of her family influence. Because of that, she’s being called Pinocchio, which also mean a bad kid. But that’s not the only reason, it’s because of her Seele Aida which taking shape as a little cute doll and the weapon she obtained and she mastered, sharp steel strings, which make her looks like a puppeteer. Seele Name : Aida Gender : Female Title / Nickname : Living Doll / Ai Element :, Earth Catalyst : glass within her reach Ability : Materialize steel lances around her Build in Weapon : Super strength Weapon Provided : steel strings Extra : Aida move floating in mid air, but can’t truly fly. Because she can’t being too far from her Meister. Symbol Location : left side of her neck Appearance and Symbol : |
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Name : Rena Renetta Hildegarderia Gender : Female Age : 25 Job : Merchant Nationality : Legna Side : Neutral Weapon of choice : Staff, dagger Ability : throw a small fireball from her right hand Bio : Born in House of Hildegarderia, one of royal knight family in Legna Nation which govern and protect Goulin City. Her city attacked by irregular in “the first invasionâ€. At that time, her parents died while try to protect the city and it awoken a seele inside her. Using her seele, she managed to save Goulin City from complete annihilation. After that she realize something wrong happened to her body which make her decided to disappear from Goulin and now she wandering around the Aetheria as a member from a Merchant Guild while hiding her status as a royal family member and meister. Seele Name : Belial Gender : Male Title / Nickname : Penjaga Neraka Element :, Fire Catalyst : Burned wood Ability : Produce fire from his whole body. Build in Weapon : - Weapon Provided : - Extra : He can fly and has fire proof skin and caused some drawback to meister’s body. Symbol Location : behind her neck Appearance and Symbol : |
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> all hey there, it's a pleasure to play with you. I'll be waiting for a few days until we have enough number of player. And feel free to ask anything. > Inx thank you, permission granted (i don't really have to think twice if you're the one who ask). and i found that symbol at google, just search with key words 'tatoo' 'tatoo design' or 'tribal tatoo'. you're find a lot of them. |
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Ok I'll be joining too. Nice to see you again Kyoshiro ;) Name :Fenris, "The Feral Knight" Gender : Male Age : 23 Job : Royal Guard, Recon Branch Nationality : Legna Side : Legna Weapon of choice : Runic Black Naginata, Black Thunder Ability : Thunderbody, uses electricity in the air to enhance his speed, strenght of ability depends on amount of electricty Bio : Fenris grew up in the woods near Gizelle Ardai. An old Meister known as the Shadow taught him how to summon and control the powers of the Seele, he also tough Fenris how to move silently and undetected. Skills which Fenris honed during his childhood making his living as a thief. He stole only what he needed to support himself and Shadow, whom he called Grandpa. He spent his days working as a delivery boy for the merchants and this way came to know the possible entrances to the merchant houses, information which he used on his nightly thieving trips. He was never connected to the thieving and gained the trust of the merchants and soon he was delivering goods to the palace as well. At the age of 13 he finally made his first nightly visit to the palace. He made it over the outer wall, but was captured by a Meister after he had made his way to the palace interior. He was thrown into the jail to wait until his punishment could be decided in the morning. Fenris escaped from the jail by summoning his Seele, Lazul, using the steel bar blocking the window and climbed over the wall back to the city. The next day soldiers were sent from the palace to seek out Fenris as he had been recognised by the guards who caught him. Fenris usually lived in the attic of one of the merchants whom he worked for, but had decided to visit Shadow in his cottage in the woods, to let things settle a bit. When he arrived at the cottage he discovered that Shadow had passed away, he had left him a letter, but Fenris was unable to read so he could only cry for the only family he had known. After day had passed Fenris headed back to the city, but was stopped by the guards at the gate who tried to capture him for questioning, Fenris escaped them easily and waited till nightfall to scale the city wall. He was going to steal enough to support him for a while on the road. He was still distraught by the death of his Grandpa and woke up the merchant who had given him place to sleep. The merchant saw the red eyed youth and offered to help him. Fenris then gave him the letter and asked if he could read it for him. The merchant started reading the letter and after he had read it he looked at Fenris with odd look on his face. He gave him back the letter and told him to go to the palace and show the letter there and told they would explain it to him. Fenris was quite puzzled at the merchants reaction but he made him promise that he would do as he asked. Fenris promised and made his way to the palace, but the guards recognised him as the unwelcome visitor from last night and tried to catch him, but Fenris managed to escape. He noticed that the commution at the gate had drawn the attention of the guards at the wall and once again he climbed over the walls of the palace. This time he managed to make his way into the palace interior undetected and looked for someone who looked willing to help him. He found his way into the library where he was awed by the size of the room and as he was standing there one of the older scribes happened to came by and noticed Fenris standing there. He greeted Fenris and asked his purpose there, Fenris gave him the letter and asked waht it said. The scribe read the letter and looked at Fenris. He then beckoned for Fenris to follow him. The scribe led Fenris to his room and told him to sleep and someone would come to get him from there in the morning. Fenris trusted the old man and fell asleep almost instantly. In the morning he was waken up by a man in military uniform who introduced himself as Captain of the Guard and as an old friend of Shadow. The letter Shadow had written was a letter of recommendation for Fenris to join the Royal Guard and as the last wish of an old member Fenris was made an initiate in the Recon Branch as he had already demonstrated considerable talent in that field. Soon after he had joined the war started. He was made full member of the Royal Guard at the age of 18, considerable achievement and he has since served the Legna Nation with honor. Seele Name : Lazul Title / Nickname : Azure Storm Element : Thunder Catalyst : a lenght of steel rod, sky must be visible Ability : Produces great amounts of electricity, this also makes charging Thunder rune stones easier when near her. Built in Weapon : Fangs and Claws Weapon Provided : Runic White Naginata, White Lightning Extra : Lazul is a bit larger than normal tiger and much more resilient, striking her with a weapon that conducts electricity causes electric shock in the attacker which can cause momentary paralysation. Symbol Location : On the back of his right hand Appearancel and Symbol : Fenris: Seele: Symbol: |
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Name:Kenji Kurayami Gender:Male Age:21 Job:Writer/Wanderer Nationality:Legna Nation Side:Neutral Weapon of choice:Short Sword Ability:Produce electricity to surround his body or his Sword. Bio:A 21 year old wanderer and renowned writer of sorts.Travels around the world in order to make his book entitled "Stars hidden behind the rainy night".He left his nation because he believed traditional life was not for him.He decided to become a writer when he read his first book in the National Library.He then found more meaning in his life as his dream was to write a book that would last until the end of time.He already wrote 3 books but found them imperfect and decided to try one last time.Comes from a simple family.He is a pacefist and prefers to stay out of fights. (for Meister) Seele Name:Noctis Title / Nickname:The Lightning Count Element:Lightning Catalyst:Lightning Stone(Sounds..pokemon-ish I know.It's just a stone that was struck by a Lightning Bolt) Ability:Able to produce lightning(eg.Make it crawl on the ground,Make Blades out of Lightning,etc.).However it has a limited range of Five(5) feet. Build in Weapon:Katana Weapon Provided:chokutÅ(Straight Sword named Raiken) Extra:One of the few Seeles that appears human and is capable of speaking.He prefers to stay back in a fight and uses his speed to escape danger.But he can hold his own when needed.The rumor is that Noctis used to be a human Count but got cursed.He then became a Seele in order to redeem himself. Symbol Location:Eyes(Both) Appearance and Symbol: Character(With chokutÅ): Symbol: Seele: Look good to you,Kyoshiro? Anyway Nice job man! I'll expect great things from this one :D |
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> Fenris pleasure to meet you again. i think your character is OK. but to make it clear, your ability is 'enchant speed' right? and your Seele ability is producing/releasing electricity to his surrounding (releasing thunder element mana assuming from the capability to fill rune stone). But i inform you that mana can't be inserted into rune stone just with a mere struck of lighting or something like that. you need to concentrate as you compressing and inserting thunder element mana into rune stone which has a certain limitation, it will brake if you insert too much mana. So, it's not an instant process. > Shae welcome. unfortunately you need some revision in your character profile. these the points : 1. your character ability has nothing to do with your Seele ability (your Seele ability is releasing loud voice while your ability is controlling people using strings). as i wrote above, Meister ability has to be similar but much weaker than their Seele's ability. that's why you have to change it. 2. the catalyst you choose is not acceptable for some reason; As we know there's no complete silent except in empty air which mean it's everywhere on earth even in water, you won't able to differ which is your voice which others as i stated above catalyst can't be come from Meister body, sound was not a concrete things you can't see nor touch and it can not considered as an object. Because of that, you've to also change your catalyst 3. Your Seele ability is too general, please be more specific. Such as shooting a high frequency sound wave in vector, because logically, if you're using your ability according to your current profile, everything will be destroyed. And what do you mean by 'Irregularity'? do you mean 'Irregular' (which refer to an unknown monster which appeared in Aetheria)? 4. Please describe what is OIC 1st squad you mentioned. > Kenji some still not quite suit here. 1. your ability is seems to be much more stronger or even with your Seele's ability. As i stated above, your ability has to be much weaker than your Seele's ability. also, 'manipulate' especially an element is not allowed here. 2. Seele only has 'one' specific ability. 3. Seele memory ,even if they have extra intelligence which allow them to speak, started when they're firstly summoned or when the Meister born. So, please be careful. They completely has no memory before that. It'll come when i reveal the truth about everything so be extra careful. |
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>Kyoshiro Well, the ability enhances my character speed, as he draws in electricity and my Seele produces electricity in to the air, so it's not exactly the same ability, more like synergic one, tell me if I need to change it. And about the charging, Lazul is the one charging the runes, it's like an instinct for her to guide some of that energy into the runes. Or would it be better if her presence made it easier to charge thunder runes due to the high amounts of electricity, maybe even allowing 'overcharging' the runes. Well I can remove that if it grows to be too complicated. Also to avoid confusion, the symbol appears on Meister, not Seele right? |
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on 2010-01-26 07:59:28 (edited 2010-01-26 08:07:51)
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> Fenris I didn't say your character and his seele has the same ability. I just make it clear. and you can't 'overcharged' rune stone, just like how you can't 'overcharge' battery. Because Rune stone is a fixed vessel, just like blowing balloon, if you blow too much air which over it's fixed limit, it'll explode. and it will be much better if the presence of her make it easier for him to charge thunder mana, but the mana itself come from himself (meister). and of course the result of charging many rune stone is exhausted. and please read the 'concept of magic' on the first post. in order to produce and attack from rune stone you also have to put a certain command along with the mana inserted into the stone. So, charging rune stone is not a simple matter which can be done in a minute. otherwise the rune stone will be just containing a mana without command which can't formed any attack. yes symbol appears on Meister body. Seele don't have it. |
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on 2010-01-26 08:31:13 (edited 2010-01-27 07:44:16)
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hm, seems interesting. i think i will join... just give me a day or two for the character sheet... oh but before i start working on the sheet... is it okay for your character to be just a human? because i have a really good idea for my character, but i want her to be human (not meister) for my idea [Edit] Okay here she is!!! Name : Leah Wilburn "Wildcard" Gender: Female Age: 18 Job: Spy/Assasin (Works as one for the Erden Military) Nationality: Branstellian (i guess this is what you would call it if your from Branstelle Empire...) Side: Erden Weapon of choice: Spear Ability: Battle Dance: Not an ability from her own Steele because she doesn't have one; but instead an ability she has gotten from watching and mimicking an elder captain before he did a mission or went into battle. The ability is a dance, which when done correctly, boosts her spirit and well-being, making her performance in battle better. Bio: Leah had a tragic childhood, because at the age of six her father died. Her mother couldn't support her children on her own, so she gave them up to orphanages. Leah and one of her brothers went to one orphanage in Elk, and her other two sisters went to a different one in another town (possibly Lyod, but Leah will never know for sure). One day, the military came to her orphanage, looking for children to train and become soldiers. Leah had been playing outside of the orphanage. They saw Leah and how much flexibility and agility she had while she was playing, and took her with them. Leah gladly went with them becayse thought that they were of the Brandstelle Military; but after they had taken her, they explained to her that they were from Erden and had come to Brandstelle to get Brandstellian natives and train them to become spys. Leah then started to resist, but realized it would get her nowhere, after all, she was an orphan and had no other place to go. They took her to their base in Lime, where she trained to become a spy, and by the time she was 14, she was at the top of her class. The Military personnel who saw that she had much potential kept in in their academy for two more years. During these two years, she was trained to kill. She graduated at 16, and currently she is living at the Lime Military Base, however she is often out on missions and such. Leah can be a very kind and sweet girl, however she was always trained to hide her true emotions at all costs. She is usually quiet and reserved, however she can change her personality for a mission if need be. |
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on 2010-01-26 16:53:48
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> Toyumi yes you can. Just like what Ashura did, you can become a normal human too. |
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on 2010-01-27 03:25:30 (edited 2010-01-29 21:27:33)
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Name : Heinkel Bertran “Ruthless Grenadier†Gender : Male Age : 51 Job : Firearms Collector Nationality : Brandstelle Side : Brandstelle Weapon of choice : Handguns (which he always stocked at least two inside his coat) Ability : An electromagnetic radar surrounding him which extends to 75 meters. Bio : Commander of the Brandstelle Army until ‘The First Invasion’ is over. He was offered the position as one of the Grand Commanders because of his achievement at single-handedly leading Brandstelle army to protect Ysk from the first invasion of Irregulars, but instead he chose an early retirement and came back to his mansion in Isara to spent the rest of his wealthy retirement with his wife and son. He also glad that he finally had all the time he wants for his hobbies; firearms collecting and painting. Some messengers from the army were sent to recruit him back to lead the army again over the time, only for them to return to their military base in Ysk with trembling legs, and one or two harmless bullet holes on their barrets. Heinkel’s not the type of person who would shoot at people out of irritation, though. He only did that for laughs. Seele Name : Marchosias Title / Nickname : Marquis of the Distinguished Military Services / Marc Element : Thunder Catalyst : One, any kind of firearm weapon per summoning. Ability : Creates a 300-meters radius of electromagnetic radar that will detect and lock on at any kind of conductive matter and/or force (e.g. : metal, wires, magnets, electric currents, etc). It can be extended to a radius of 1 km if Marchosias stood his ground or didn’t move from his spot and focuses. Build in Weapon : Various diversities of dangerous firearms that’s attached and strapped on his body. Weapon Provided : Infrared goggle, with built-in night vision, heat sensor and autolock feature. Extra : A quiet, obedient Seele. Heinkel sometimes summoned him just so his dog-lover son can play with him, which Marchosias just... Followed along obediently. Eventhough he thought all the weaponries stuck on his body isn’t exactly a good child's toy material. He could speak quite a bit, but only when Heinkel asked him for a response or when he deemed the situation calls for it. Symbol Location : His tongue. Appearance and Symbol: Heinkel Marchosias Tattoo Notes: - Sorry about Heinkel's picture. I couldn't find any pics that suits what I had in mind when I create this character, and once I did, he didn't look very... Brandstellian. XD~ - Tell me if I need to change anything. |
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on 2010-01-27 05:38:17
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> Shae i notice you've make a change to your character, but still, 1 thing you miss. about the ability of your character, it's still has nothing to do with your Seele ability. please change it, since your character ability has to be similar to your Seele ability but much weaker. > Kyokubane welcome, don't worry about pic, at least it can make use easier to imagine how you looks like. your profile is good and fine. |
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on 2010-01-27 06:10:43
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@Kyoshiro-Done some editing.Look ok now? :D |
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on 2010-01-27 06:23:00
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> Kenji looks better now. just pay attention to my previous warning about your Seele's extra. > All added your character on the first post, listed based on nationality for now. |
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on 2010-01-27 07:47:26
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okay i edited my first post and my character is up. i hope she's okay if not then let me know please. ^^ also, i have one more question: it says in the description of the rp that the nations are on the brink of war, so will the rp be starting in war or would it be starting at the brink of war? |