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I like the story.I feel it's quite long and when i read till number 5, i already zzzz. Seriously,try make it as simple as i can understand. Peace =) |
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on 2008-05-11 22:47:36 |
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@ Karuzo: Yes. Hehe... I'm sorry, was rushing to lunch that time. ^^' ~Medical Center, Iris' room~ Mikuru: *walks in* Hi Amado-san. Zweihander-kun. Uh... Please tell me if you need anything. *looks away* I'll be right here, so... ~Medical Center, ER~ Sakari: *sitting in bed* ....so. Her condition got worse...? Mahiro: That's what I heard when I was walking down the hall. ..... Sakari: So... should I go-? Mahiro: Well... It's based on what you think. Sakari: *looking down at her lap* ...Well. I think it would be right to do so... but, I'm also getting the feling that, I'd hate myself to go see my sister, and show her any sympathy. Mahiro: Sakari. Sakari: *looks up* H-hm? Mahiro: Do you... remember the first time we met? Sakari: *smiles* of course I do... we where out by the train station. And, I just saw a young red haired twin tail run though me, and made me lose my purse. I ran out of money to take the train, and you lent me some when you saw me panicking at the ticket booth. We've been best friends since then. Mahiro: Do you remember why you hate your sister? Sakari: I-it's because... I envied how much praise she got from mother. Mom... would always compliment her in things that I couldn't even get close to being good at... She was better... and-. *sakari hold her head* Mahiro: ...Sakari-chan? Sakari: N-no. It's just that... That story sounds odd for some reason... I mean, she was really better then me at things, and more popular. But... With mother sick like this... We should be taking care of each other... I dont remember hating her so much... Mahiro: *closes her eyes* Yeah. So, Sakari-chan, do you remember how we met? Sakari: Well, of course, silly. You just asked. We where at the train station... and-.... ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Sakari: *standing at the ticket booth, reaches into her purse* ?????: Minagi!!! *bumps into Sakari as she runs past* Sakari: *drops her purse* Ugh! *the contents of it scatter on the ground* Oh no! I didnt pay for the ticket! "Ah-! Are you alright?" Sakari: *turns to the person* H-hai. Gomenasai... Onee-sama. I lost out train ticket money... Iris: *walks to the ticket booth, and purchases both of them tickets, turns back to Sakari and grins* ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Sakari: ....and then Iris saw me panicking and when ahead to buy both of us tickets. Mahiro: ... Sakari: U-uhh? *holds her head* What? Onee-san? Onee-san wasn't supposed be there... she was- Mahiro: There. Sakari: *looks at Mahiro* What? Mahiro: Iris was the person who payed for that ticket, not me. We never even saw each other that day... Sakari: B-but! That was how we met! When we where six years old, we where best freinds since then! Iris wasn't there... She going to see auntie in Osaka! And... Mahiro: You both went with each other. Sakari: What are you... talking about? Mahiro-chan? Hijiri: *Walks in* Sakari-chan. Can you please come with me for a moment? Sakari: *looks at Hijiri* Hijiri-san? ~Shop Front~ Bottle Bottom Glasses'd Salesgirl: Uwaaa! *sparkles with exuberance* What valorism! Shopgirl: *sweatdrops* It really isnt if he's being payed to do it... Tsunami: *tugs on Hay's sleeve, her facial expression giving off her un-comfortability towards the current situation*   |
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on 2008-05-12 03:48:24 (edited 2008-05-12 07:35:20)
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~Shop Front~ Kay: well, excuse me then, looks like I hafta leave the joint...excuse me then... *sighs as he felt the emptiness of his wallet in his pocket when he turns around and heads for the rest* Kay: i should've seen this coming...Cthaqa definitely can't hold money... |
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on 2008-05-12 07:24:55 (edited 2008-05-12 07:29:47)
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~Medical Center, Iris' room~ Mikuru: *walks in* Hi Amado-san. Zweihander-kun. Uh... Please tell me if you need anything. *looks away* I'll be right here, so... Karuzo: Nothing much to report, she is now stabled, but.... -Karuzo, for the first time he lost is calmness, he punched the wall and small cracks appeared- Karuzo: Why... is this happening????? -still his fist on the he clenched it so hard that small traces of blood was seen- Karuzo: I dont like this... I dont like it.... -then he went closer to Mikuru and wispered and stealthly gave her his testube- Karuzo: Commander, after this request i shall be donwgraded to the rank i choose.... please test the blood inside... then if possible get..... then its over.. -then he looked at Iris, the girl looked back- Karuzo: do you think I exist here?? Iris: or is that a coincidence you are here?? Karuzo: And do you believe in it??? -then silence was heard in the room-  --> |
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on 2008-05-12 17:26:08 |
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~Medical Center, Iris' room~ Mikuru: ...*walks closer to Karuzo, and whispers* Zweihander... I dont understand-... What do you want me to test this for? ~Medical Center, ER~ Hijiri: Sakari-chan, it's about your sister. I just got off the phone to have her transferred to another hopsital. Sakari: Another hospital? Hijiri: Yes... you see... ~Medical Center, 2nd ER~ (the atmosphere suddenly got really heavy around here...) Kyon: *looks at Yoroko laying in bed* ~Shop Front~ Shop girl: *bows as he walks off* Have a nice day... Kay: i should've seen this coming...Cthaqa definitely can't hold money... Tsunami: S-surimasen... I'mm make sure to get father to pay you back.... |
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on 2008-05-13 07:04:01 |
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~Shop Front~ Kay: don't worry about it...yours wasn't that expansive... *sighs as he looks at the baggage next to Cthaqa* Kay: it's her that I'm more worried about... |
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on 2008-05-29 04:35:27 |
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~Medical Center, Iris' room~ Mikuru: ...*walks closer to Karuzo, and whispers* Zweihander... I dont understand-... What do you want me to test this for? -Karuzo whispered back- Karuzo: As the data i gathered... in her blood lies the answer for their cure.. I dont want to stand here and do nothing -In the future- General: Are you sure about this? ??: Karuzo is a person with one word... --> |
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on 2008-05-30 08:50:58 |
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~Medical Center, Iris' room~ Mikuru: ...I'll do this for Amado-san's sake... *thinking* He's ignored precedure so many times, but... *Mikuru walks off* ~Medical center~ Mikuru: *puts away the tube* Even if you do care about her that much... It's not our liberty to interfere with what happens here. If it's outside the context off Suzimiya-san, then I cant help. Gomenesai... ~Medical Center, ER~ Hijiri: I cant take care of her own my own anymore, so she'll need to be transferred immediately. Mahiro: Sakari, maybe you should go see her... Sakari: *looks hesitantly for a moment, then nods* O-okay. I'll go. ~Shop Front~ Tsunami: Ehheh... Erh... *momentarily struggles to find a conversation striker* Tsunami: *glances at Ithuqa and Cthaqa* So... do you two spend time with Kay-san often? |
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on 2008-05-30 09:09:03 |
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~Medical Center, Iris' room~ Mikuru: ...I'll do this for Amado-san's sake... *thinking* He's ignored precedure so many times, but... *Mikuru walks off, Karuzo followed* ~Medical center~ Mikuru: *puts away the tube* Even if you do care about her that much... It's not our liberty to interfere with what happens here. If it's outside the context off Suzimiya-san, then I cant help. Gomenesai.. Karuzo: THAT'S THE reason why i asked about my demotion right... its an equivalemt exchange... I contact the MP HQ and i said that ANY unnesseary actions that may trigger their decision to capture me just do not hesitate and go hehe -then the boy returned to the room, in the future- General: So he called... Adviser: Yes sir... General: This is not the first time right?? Adviser: Yer sir Geberal: He is reaaly like his father... but more deadly..... heheheheheh --> |
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on 2008-05-31 19:44:27 |
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~Shop Front~ Kay: yea, most of the time... *looking at the two sisters walking and laughing infront of them* Kay: we're always together that people might think that it's natural...although, I used to be all alone before they came...that at times, I missed that solitude... *smiles a little* Kay: even so...we've been together so much ever since they came...oh how fast they grew...anyways...Tsunami...what are you gonna do now? |
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on 2008-05-31 23:19:17 |
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~Shop Front~ Tsunami: Well... *looks up for a moment, then to Kay* Tsunami: At this point, the only people who I can hope to get answers from is Yoroko or Kyosu-... *looks down* I mean, Kyon. I, think they're people I knew from before, so; I might be able to at least know why I'm here, in this Suzumiya-san's place. Tsunami: -Could you help me do that? ~Medical Center, Iris' Room~ *Sakari and Mahiro walk inside* Sakari: *walks inside, but remains silent* Mahiro: ...how are you feeling Iris? |
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on 2008-06-01 06:43:05 |
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~Shop Front~ *closes his right eye and looks at Tsunami with the other* Kay: i know you might get answers from Yoroko...but Kyon... *shrugs* Kay: maa...iika? *looks at his sisters* Kay: you know...all this, might just be fate's little trick to pass the time...but that's just my belief...well, shall we go back? |
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on 2008-06-04 05:03:56 (edited 2008-06-06 08:15:58)
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~Medical Center, Iris' Room~ *Sakari and Mahiro walk inside* Sakari: *walks inside, but remains silent* Mahiro: ...how are you feeling Iris? -Karuzo saw them enter, seeing Sakari made him uneasy so he went out, he knows that Sakari hated him, he stay outside- Iris: So you are Mahiro-san... I am pleased to meet you... I am fine... Is Sakari-san doing alright?? -Outside Iris's room- Karuzo: All I need is the cure.... --> |
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~Medical Center, Iris' Room~ Mahiro: Well, see for yourself... *steps aside, revealing Sakari behind her* Sakari: .... Mahiro: ... *from there,the atmosphere in the room became heavy* ~Shop Front~ Tsunami: *nods* ~Later, Outside the Medical Center~ Tsunami: *spots an ambulance parked outside the medical center* Oh, there's a Ambulance here. |
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on 2008-06-05 01:19:35 (edited 2008-06-06 08:13:00)
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~Medical Center, Iris' Room~ Mahiro: Well, see for yourself... *steps aside, revealing Sakari behind her* Sakari: .... Mahiro: ... *from there,the atmosphere in the room became heavy* -Iris closed her eyes and giggled and open them again- Iris: I guess you were forced to be here right?? Thank you for passing by... Mahiro-san... please take care of Sakari when I am gone... Make sure that she will live happily, until.... -then the atmosphere became spine chilling, just like a unwanted event may happen. Outside Karuzo heard these words, he clenched his fist, he knows one thing... and that thing does not making him any comfort- Karuzo: Sakari... Iris... --> |
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(@ Karuzo: I apologize, this'll have to be a rush ending T-T) ~Medical Center, Iris' Room~ Mahiro: Amado- Sakari: gh! Dont say that! Mahiro: Sakari-chan? Sakari: Why do you have to be so hopeless!? Always putting everyone else ahead of you! Mahiro: ... Sakari: In yet... you always get praised by everyone. And excel without making it look any easier. I doubt that I'm even really your sister at all. If you died... I'd....- ~Medical Center, ER~ Yoroko: *suddenly speaks out* IONS restore complete... Kyon: Yoroko...? *sits up from his chair* It feels lie I've been in a nightmare this entire time. Yoroko: ...True. Actually. Kyon: Ah-. This isnt one of those dreams where you wake up into another dream? Yoroko: ...Kyon, do you know how powerful a human mind is? *looks out the window* It dictates how we perceive the world... It can make us immune to pain, or suffer pain that isnt been there, and believe in what isnt true. Kyon: (I just woke up, please dont talk like that...) Yoroko: Iris and Sakari... the reality between them isnt like what it is now. Kyon: Oi...! Yoroko! Make some sense here! Yoroko: Mahiro... How old does she look? Kyon: ...that one blonde? Er, like 15. Yoroko: *shakes her head* According to your time, that girl was only born a couple of months ago.... ~Medical Center, ER~ Sakari: Mahiro! That's insane! We've been best friends for years now! Mahiro: *shakes her head* No. It's wrong... When, the real Mahiro threw me out, she threw out all the memories the Mahiro that was your friend had. Those where fabricated. Our freindship was fabricated, your mother, Iris' and Your sickness was fabricated. This life I lived, was just a story written into my and your memory. Sakari: N-now... who would want to do something like that?! Mahiro: People who wanted to. It dosent matter. I dont have the originals' power, so soon, everything will return to normal. Before I was here. Sakari: .... Mahiro: *smiles* Sakari, do your remember the first day we went to school with each other? Sakari: ...No. Mahiro: Or the day I tricked Tomokazu-kun to take you to the movies for you? Sakari: No. Mahiro: Or when we tried to-... Sakari: *holds her head* Urgh!!! Why am I forgetting?! *looks at Mahiro* You have to be lying... Mahiro-chan! Mahiro: ....Even if the memories are fake. The feelings where still real. Sakari: *falls to her knees, the room starts to turn white* Mahiro: When you wake up, You'll be Sakari Amado, and I'll be Mahiro. Just two other girls. But, this time, I'll become your friend, *smiles* for real this time. Iris and your Mom'll realize they're healthy too, isnt that nice? Sakari: ....Mahiro... ~Medical Center, ER~ Yoroko: Everything related to Iris, Sakari, and Mahiro will be forgotten as the veil that Application Mahiro put up. Everyone will be fine, because, all this "Didnt happen". (for a sudden moment, everything felt like bliss) ~Outside the hospital~ Hijiri: *standing outside, in front of the paramedics* ...? Ugh. Why am I out here? Paramaedic 1: *holding his head* W-why did you call us out here again? Tsunami: ... *holding her shoulders, and looks at Kay* Hey, did you get that strange feeling? ~Medical Center, Hallways~ Mikuru: ....? *looks around* Are? ...Oh! The patients are supposed come soon. I need to clean the lobby! ~Medical Center, Iris' Room~ Sakari: *wakes up on th ground* ...what am I doing here? *look to the nearby bed, and spots her sister there* Sakari: Onee-san!? *runs over to her side* Onee-san! What are you doing in the hopsital!? *looks up** Come to think of it, why are we in this hospital? ~Medical Center, ER~ Kyon: Hm. *blinks* Yoroko. What where you talking about again? Yoroko: *smiles* Oh, just about how much I adore you when you make those sarcastic remarks in your monologue. Kyon: *sighs* (At least Nagato-san isnt as...) |
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on 2008-06-07 00:15:32 (edited 2008-06-07 00:19:15)
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~Outside the hospital~ *eyes narrowing down to the sky* Kay: think so...for some odd reason...I've got a feeling my memory is not what it seemed to be...no...rather...I feel like I've got double memory... Ithuqa: *thinking* memory replacement? most probably...I still remember the things that happened... Kay: *thinking* that sudden blissful feeling...it doesn't feel...right ~Hospital, somewhere~ Nagato: memories of the entities here have been altered... Itsuki: it seems so...it's too bad that I can't do anything at all to help...but to simply observe... Nagato: my priorities still remains the same...but I've got words not to help...even when I want to... |
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on 2008-06-07 07:39:25 (edited 2008-06-07 07:59:39)
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@Ugo- well id ont mind it any way... please read this post if you have any qualms about it ~Medical Center, Iris' Room~ Sakari: *wakes up on th ground* ...what am I doing here? *look to the nearby bed, and spots her sister there* Sakari: Onee-san!? *runs over to her side* Onee-san! What are you doing in the hopsital!? *looks up** Come to think of it, why are we in this hospital? -Karuzo sensed also, it seems that his memories were altered but he remember about Iris and Sakari's family, he entered at the room, pretended to be an assistant- Karuzo: Well let's just say, that Iris fainted while working on her flowershop, at that time i was a customer.. i did only what a concern person can do... -Iris looked at the Karuzo- Iris: So.. is that so, that you anyway... i should pay you for your help Karuzo: No, it alright the important thing is that both of you is alright -then Karuzo hold the hands of the two girls- Karuzo: Please be careful next time, and love each other for the benefit of your family -Karuzo moved away, but- Iris: Karuzo- -then the boy stopped, and wondered how did she remember his name...- Karuzo: .... Iris: I ---..... Karuzo: The flowers will be the memories of this place.... the two memories of life... -the boy left the room, Iris's tears flowed from her eyes- Iris: Arigato Karuzo-kun.... -outside, Karuzo silently cried, it was his first time that he cried for his life... he loved Iris... but he must face the reality, on Iris' flowershop, a folded piece of papar was lying on the Family frame of the happy Amado Family- -Medical Center, Corridor- -Karuzo was still gaining his composture, when Iris and Sakari wne tout of the room, he saw a very happy sisters, he went closer- Karuzo: Have a very happy life Iris: Thank you... -then Karuzo embraced Iris and Sakari, then he kissed on their cheeks- Karuzo: Thank you both of you.... i learned a valuable lesson for both of you... please be strong and have faith -Karuzo left the two, with their faces blushed- --> |
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@ Karuzo: Nah, none at all, just throwing in a final prologue, which ends it for this story arc that has taken up quite a considerable amount of the page.) ~Medical Center, ER, Later~ (A little afterwards, Tsunami, Serenade-san and his sisters came in) Kyon: Ah... That Dress-... (She lost her memory, She comes in with Serenade, she's in different clothes, and she looks partially nervous or embarrassed... Ugh!?) *unknowing to Kyon, looking at Kay with an expession that clearly expressed his thoughts* Yoroko: Serenade-san, Ithuqa and Cthaqa, and Tsunami. Do you need anything? ~A Prologue, One Year Later~ ~Town, Train Station~ Sakari: *walking past it, holding her schoolbag* Lets see, Tomkazu-kun's birthday is next week... *sighs* Maybe Onee-san might be able to help me decide what to give... *nearby, a trash can falls over, Sakari quickly turns to it's direction, and sees a blonde girl, about the same age, fallen to her knees with a bannana peel on her head* Sakari: *runs over to her side* Daijobu? ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Sakari: *after setting up the can, and getting the girl somewhat cleaned, both sitting on a bench by the station* Girl: .... Sakari: So, uh, Sakari Amado Desu, ano namu wa? Girl: *looks at Sakari and blinks* ... Sakari: So, who are you? Did you run into the trash can? Girl: Finding, food. Sakari: *giggles* That's a good one...! Girl: *looking at Sakari with a serious look* Sakari: ...oh. Girl: *stands up, and starts to walk away* Sakari: *stands up* Ah-! Matte! Girl: *stops, and look at Sakari* Sakari: My mother cooks really wall, you're free to join us tonight. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Girl: *walking beside, the girl on the way home* Sakari: So, do you live around here? Girl: *shakes her head* Sakari: So, where is your mom and dad? Girl: None. Sakari: *feels something flicker in the back of her mind, and continues to walk* Girl: *suddenly stops* Sakari: *stops, and turns around* Girl: ....Atashi... Atashi wa- ..... Sakari: ...! *puts her hand over her mouth, her eyes slowly squint, as tears form in them* ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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~Medical Center, ER, Later~ *noticing Kyon's expression, he gave a small but noticeable smirk before answering* Kay: nope, not really...I guess, it's time to leave this place eh? *takes out his cellphone and flips it open* Itsuki: *just shrugged* Yuki: *blank look* Kay: just say the word... |