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on 2009-05-26 05:15:25 (edited 2009-05-26 05:17:53)
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K.M.R: Yayyy! I got through it!! Wooh- it's very good! Heh, I didn't mean a shorter story, i just meant post the whole story in halves =^.^= Do you know, I actually twitched when i read about the girl getting stabbed on her wrists and stuff- very.. gory! ^^ Some scenes are *cough* pretty violent, but OMG! When it got to the fight with the Fallen and Baphomet- honestly, that was Amazing !! Really good story there! I absoulutely enjoyed the one-on-one fighting scene <3 I really like how you described the Fallen-dude-guy, really cool! And the ending- of course, brilliant. English is not your first language, right? But I feel you've done such a good job- I know you try so hard and your spelling is kept as best as possible- thank you for the effort you have put in *bows humbly* Faiz: Kk, I'll add that siggy! It leads here, to this thread, right? [Wow, the siggy is amazing ^^ try it!!] When did you hurt my feelings?? If it's about the gender-mix-up, nah, it's fine lol! I found that amusing- just being all drama-queeny 'bout it ^^ Hmmm, if you can't post it on June 1st, you can PM it to me the latest you can, and label it as the Competition Entry, and I will keep it in my messages and read it on June 1st, to keep everything fair ^^, but yeah, try and post it on the 1st if you can! Aww, I really wanna hear more for Ningen Wa ==' *Shudders* French... Basil'll know what i mean... T_T   |
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on 2009-05-26 09:19:50 (edited 2009-05-26 09:22:51)
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@Mokona- sorry for the gory type story but i really thank you for reading it... frankly that story is one of my short and one shot story about... 3- 5 pages [short than Vector crisis and IEC series with has more that 10 pages] Possible I can post the prologue of Baldr Core: Frontier of the Crimson Sky days from now just give me enough time @Faiz- it is alright.. take your time... I am just waiting for the comments so that i can improve it 2All- Ok i just finished one story then I have more to come!!!  --> |
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@ Mokona: You're right! We are all kinda like family considering the fact we're the only club members who swarm this thread on a weekly basis. *Hugs everyone too* Writing for me is also largely fueled by passion for an idea. Hm! I will continue my stories soon!!! >_< @ KM: Un~! I really do see lots of effort put into this. There exists a couple of minor grammatical errors, but hey, I seem to say that for lots of entries. The grammatical errors in this one where very minor. But, I also must noe there there are lots of run on sentences. (where you have near paragraphs worth of sentence full of commas) Considering Karuzo copyrighted his, I guess I'll have to make up a passage! (Run On) Kate ran far across the lawn, she saw yuri nearby playing with estelle, they where playing with wooden sticks, fighting each other, estelle hit yuri in the side, yuri retaliated with a brutal wolf fang. (Putting in periods) Kate ran far across the lawn, and saw yuri nearby playing with estelle. Both of them where playing with wooden sticks, fighting each other. Kate then saw estelle hit yuri in the side, so he retaliated with a brutal wolf fang. Try to cut up sentences when you can. Generally, it'll be rightfully needed when you can count more than 2 commas in your sentence. (unless it's a list). Also, cutting up sentences a bit might also make you notice you're lacking in detail. So why not add more? (Heavily detailed version) One morning, Kate decided to take a stroll across the garden at the top of the sword stair. When she arrived, she saw her friends, Yuri and Estelle playing in an open field within the garden. Estelle and Yuri where play-fighting, using two rough looking wooden sticks. Suddenly, Kate saw Estelle strike Yuri with a painful strike to his side. Yuri retaliated by activating his unique and powerful mystic arte, Brutal Wolf Fang. ~~~~~~~~~~ Remember, to be mindful of the people who will read this for the first time, and to continue to develop one's habit and skill in proofreading! ^_^ @ Faiz: Thanks! Hugh... karuzo manages to pump out so many stories. It's almost exhausting to keep up with. (Plus, I got bad procrastination!) I was intending just to write down one of my free write journal entires from class, but that journal is currently being graded. -__-   |
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Bon, a new story! I'll read it when I have at least half an hour of free time. Ugo I've been doing that. Thanks for the concern. Mokona Bon, a massage is just magnifique! Why not tell Faiz why he's mon beau-frère. *clearly adding in a bunch of French words to see if Mokona will have a fit* Also, I'll try my hardest to submit my story, but if I really can't, I'll forfeit. Faiz Just ask Mokona why we're brothers-in-law. Hehe. >:D K.M. From what I've deducted, your latest post is a bit on the gory side. That only means I'll be enjoying that. To everyone If you guys don't mind, I'll be posting some teasers for my other projects next week, since my current one is in hiatus. |
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on 2009-05-27 23:08:59 (edited 2010-04-14 05:37:14)
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@Ugo- thanks for that... to tell you the truth that story is made of some run-off sentences and random sentences that i put on my document in which they were separated by lines... Sorry for posting too many stories... it became my hobby and too kill time... Now i am thinking of a new story concept with the help of Back-On's song Chain About to copyright... well i just put it there becasue it was on my final document and i am lazy to edit or delete that... hehehhhe not to brag but here are are titles that i am working on... [2009- onwards] Fatale Nights: Crimson Origin- Crimson Rose Dragon Fatale Nights: Merciless Origin- The fallen [Original] Baldr Sky: Frontier of the Crimson Sky Baldr Core: The Lost Paradise Vector Crisis [continuation] Student Cyborg: Minerva Boogiepop: Phanstama Roa Boogiepop: Realtia Roa Gilmore of Alice -under construction concept- [2009- onwards] halted or no plans to make it approved Titles that was finished [2008-2009] Winter's Spring Baldr Sky: Frontier of the Crimson Sky [Prologue] Fatale Nights: Merciless Origin- The fallen (T_T) (T_T) (T_T) I cry becasue of this.... --> |
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Ugo.. sensei! I think these mini notes about sentence structure and building character relations/personality are great! Maybe you could do some official posts which you could bunch together as lessons for some of us *coughmecough*- cuz i think they're great!! I tend to write what I think and throw in commas when i feel like it :P I really look forward to reading more of your stories when they come! *Hugs Ugo-nee* Basil: *twitching* yeah, damn right i noticed the French >.> (xDD - are you trying to kill me??) *massage becomes attempt to break bones in Basil's shoulder* How's that for ya? Okayy, then. *cracks knuckles* That feels better. I'll tell Faiz then *rolls eyes* If you really don't have time, then I guess you can forfeit.. but try to work on it anyways! *Still relaxing in the Sun~~~ mwhahaha now you've eliminated my guilt about this- pfft, french...* Faiz-nee: aww, damn it, I can't do it! >> T_T I'll tell you secretly later tee-hee ^_^ K.M.R: I think the names of your stories are really cool! ;D I think it's great that you post so many of your stories- you're keeping this thread alive dude! I find it thoroughly enjoyable to read your stories anyhow! Keep it up! Why do you cry again? heh :S Is it because you have not finished them? |
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@All- maybe I will post some teasers on my porjects later... i forgot to have a back-up copy of it... --> |
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I am now officially starting to read through all competition entries. Please be patient whilst waiting for the verdict. The final result will be announced within this week, possibly. I wish everyone the best of luck and hope that we can further co-operate in projects like this, I also hope that everyone will be helping out with the Visual Novel project by also considering writing arcs for the story. All of this will be discussed at an IM session organised by Ugo in the Visual Novel thread. I sincerely hope everyone can be there to give ideas and discuss with us the latest information. Again, good luck and have a nice day! _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ xDDD Sowwy if that was a bit formal for y'all!! I will shorten it for easier reading: Hey peeps! :) I'm starting to judge the entries now- so keep yer pants on! I'm gonna announce the winner some time this week, if i can be bothered to get through them all that quickly *scratches head*. Mokona wishes everybody very good luck and hope we can carry on working with each other some time! :) Also, you all best be helping out with the Visual novel project >< or Mokona will personally come for you *makes ghost sounds*!! There is an IM meeting from Ugo-nee that Again, may the best man win and everybody have a |
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on 2009-06-01 13:43:58 (edited 2009-06-01 13:44:09)
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Oy, everyone. I just went through the first part of the school's mathematical inferno, and I'm quite satisfied to learn that I passed. However, you could say I'm very, VERY worn out. Studying doth paid out, but it's one helluva cost. Mokona Yeeow! Sorry about the French, Mokona! Anyway, since I never made it through the competition, would it be a bit of a bother if I join the judging committee? I apologize for not having pitched in any entry, though. Ugo I just read your message; however, the part where you mentioned that I frequently check out the forum is... quite the contrary. School had me monopolized almost for the entire week, so I could just sneak in a quick glance with my iPod. I'll try to read EVERYTHING that I missed when I'm free. Also, I just read your RP, the one called AWP, and that piqued my interest. Not joining it when I was still that active was, I could say, a big mistake; the structure of the story really impressed me. Noting the fact that the thread have reached well over 500 posts, I deduced that joining in mid-way is out of the question; however, if you are to start anything similar to that RP, drop me a line and I'd be more than willing to join. By the way, I noticed that your explanatory post was reminiscent of a video game. Did Tales of Legendia inspire you? |
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@ Mokona: Ehh, well I guess if people would like to... Maybe it'd be easier for Doomlight to just link them! ^^'. I only type out lessons as they come up (like when people want me to point out things that they need work on) Good luck with all that reading!!!! *thumbs up* @ Basil: Eh? Did you read through the entire thing!? 0.0 Well, yeah, AWP is probably one of the oldest ones still active (as the current thread is a continuation) on Gendou City, it wasnt even started by, me! Rather I temporarily took it over and it became one massive anime parody thread. It was only itll AWP 2 came out that it became the storyline it is now. The only things that's kept it alive are the fellow RPers wiling to keep going forward. The story itself is kind of in two right now, one takes the point of veiw of the so called "main party" while there's also Bloodymoon's group. I really have to find a way to get them together though, it's really dragged itself on... Yes, I'm a terribly avid Fangirl of the Tales Series. Whether I know it or not, my stories tend to have some form of influence from the titles. (most of my drawings are RPG esque characters >.<) The most recent one, "Memories of Harmonia" is still relatively new. You can join that if you wish. (it has a sort of Turn Based RPG element to it, but that occurs only on occasion. Heck, one hasn't even happened yet) ACK! Whent off topic! But anyway, do you still want to be a part of the IM meetings? Just because you didn't enter doesn't mean you're instantly disqualified with helping the story! (Right Mokona?) |
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Ugo- [buzzer] Wrong! Basil not entering is a huge violation in my books and he should be disqualified at all costs. :P Joking aside, yes, it'd be preferable (>.>) to have Basil at the IM meetings and (sigh) we hope Basil can make it to the IM sessions... Hai! I'll need the luck! - well, if you don't have anything to do, why not? I think the lessons are amazing! Basil- Oh, next time with the French thing, it's gonna be hell, d'ya hear me?? xD I'd be more than grateful for you to join the judging commitee- (note: I've already read through some graet entries- though I shouldn't really be saying :P) I'll send the entries over to you once i get some confirmation, okay? Oh, and of course, if it's not a bother for everyone else! ~~Oh, oh! And well done Basill for passing maths!~~ Oh! I totally forgot to say!! Dead-deadline for competition entries will be extended to Thursday 4th June... If there are any more outstanding entries please PM them to me a.s.a.p! The reason for this is because judging will be over on this Friday, before the IM sessions, so, I will have time to look through more. |
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Okay, to make things short, I'm on for the IM meetings on Saturday, probably 18.00 GMT to 21.00 GMT Now, the question is: what are we going to use for IM meetings? Yahoo! Messenger, or something else? Ugo I'll join in when I'm free. And of course, I'm still in the IM meetings. Na, I'll be back on Friday for confirmations and stuff. Mokona Ja-ja-jawhol!! Nicht mehr Französisch!! Nein doch!!! (Clearly interested in the German language) Anyway, that wasn't French, so please don't kill me. *pathetic attempt at pleading* Yes, I'd be more than happy to join the judging committee. And thanks. My headache serves as a reminder why I passed that. |
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@ Mokona: M-matte! I havent est the dates yet! I've been busy with finals lately (Today's the last and hardest set of tests for me ^^') Once I got all the GMTs down, I'll make an announcement on an official time. Of course, I'll have lots of free time after this considering today too is my last day at school. Just saying, there's a chance the first one will be this weekend, but dont count on it 100%. @ Basil: Everything about the meetings is on the other thread. But, right now I have it set for us to use MSN Live Messenger. (since, that's what most people have). There's been suggestions on other things, but I haven't heard much of a call to use them from the other participants. |
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Ugo: Gooood luck on your final tests! Mines are really only beginning -_- I've got a science one tomorrow, the following week, the week after that, and then a maths one the next week :P (wish me luck!) And l-last day? It's only.. beginning of June! You really break up that early? How lucky! >< Okay, btw, I'm planning to have the results down by Friday (everybody please keep their eyes out for that) so, this weekend is not a problem! ^^ Basil: ohh, very nice ;) I have no problem with German! ^^ Except we were just watching a film (very graphic *coughwe-saw-soldiers-blow-jewish-peoples-heads-offcough* about the Holocaust) I notice you are interested in a lot of languages Basil-san! Very nice i must admit.. *pleading accepted* lol. It's okay, just tone it down, yeah? I'll send the entries right away! *massages Basil's head* oh, i wanted to ask- is there an easy way or HTML for making those lines in your posts? I just literally draw the lines until i see fit :) |
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@All- Teasers for my new project Baldr Core: Lost Paradise “Can you help us?†“…†“Did you choose yourself as a hacker?†“I am a just a hacker that can hack any networks, I am doing it because it was fun and at the same time I learned something from it†“And selling it?†“No, I keep it for myself; I am selfish bastard that thinks only for himself†“I will make you an offer, an offer that can save you from nay harsh punishment?†“An offer? What do you mean?†“I will offer you a position from Virtual Security Committee; we are lacking man power because of the incidents happening in the cyber world that causes havoc on the systems†“If I decline that offer will you still persist s me on taking it?†“No, I am not that kind of person, your skills are superior from us and I am just amazed on how you hacked the Sys-Link network†The hacker was just silent, the Captain sighed “I am sorry for disturbing you, I just wanted to recruit you so that your sentence would be lessen even a bit†The Captain stood and fixed her things; she bowed and left the area, as the Captain was out of the cell she was been greeted by her comrades “Did it go well?†“No… He did not accept the offer; his abilities are above from us†“Did our superiors know your actions?†“Yes, but I will report empty handed, as we encountered him, he just managed to infiltrate and got many information sheets then it took 10 minutes of the Link-Sys security to sense his presence†“But almost most of the hackers do that, right?†“Link-Sys does not link to other or any public and private network adding to that he is using a level 5 unregistered and unknown avatar†“Wait a Level 5 unregistered and unknown avatar? How could that possible happen?†“Probably it was a custom made, with a self made program, or similar or something†“Let’s resume our duties; we must make sure the integrity of the network†The group went to their places and resumed their work, but the Captain was worried about the boy’s fate. *-*-* “So this is the guy that you are talking about so much†“Yes sir, I know that this is wrong but he is young yet he excels on some important areas that might the VSC needed and the same time we need some help because the recent events of the cyber world has an effect in real world†“That is true, I heard some reports about his manipulation and fighting abilities, I am also quite impressed about it. Alright, I am on it just make sure that he will comply on the CBL of VSC†“Thank you sir for your understanding, I will bear the responsibility if he does not abide the conditions that you and I had set†The girl saluted and the two left the room, the General “She has a point anyway, sometimes we should do the things that violates some minor rules, especially it is concerning what is happening around us†Outside, on the hallways of the VSC, the hacker was observing the place; VSC’s compound was larger than he thought, then after two minutes, the two stopped on a door that has the insignia of the VSC and the Brigade number, it was the 1st Brigade “Here we are, get hold of yourself†The two went inside, the boy saw everyone inside began to unwind, they chat and do something that can relax them, but somehow they stopped when they noticed the Captain and the hacker entered, they went silent a bit “This is Souma Kreuz, he will be part of the 1st Brigade with probationary status, he I won’t participate for a week due to his application and other concerns†“I am Midori Kagatsura, I am in charge of operations relay and maintenance of the avatars and members in and out of the cyber world†“Nitori, Ayaka, you are really serious about the deal you made†“Kiritsugo, Cy-Driver, I cannot believe that we will have a hacker in the team?†“Ryian Feng Dao, call me China, most of the time I slack on and off duty but when I drive-in, expect I am not the princess that they looked much†“It is nice to meet all of you, just let me adjust a bit†Without any warning the alarm system, was activated, Midori posted herself immediately check the situation “Celestia’s website was being hacked and it was being destroyed, the 4th and 13th divisions were being deployed to intercept, the ones who attacked were… the Blackdust†“1st Brigade ready to deploy†“Yes ma’am!†The brigade went to their stations which is a modified chair with log-in jack and cables and prepared themselves, in the other hand Souma remained and observed with Midori “EEG normal, Heart Rate normal, preparing to drive in, you will be transmitted to at the Celestia’s website at the center area, number of enemies were unknown, eliminate all targets, but ensuring the safety of the civilians†The jack suddenly moved and inserted to their “Drive Start!†The consciousness of the team traveled and reached their current location, all of them were armed and ready “Midori, what are the current locations of the enemy?†“They were divided into three groups with unknown numbers, the nearest to your location were 70 parsecs away, the other one was 150 parsecs and the last one were at 300 parsecs, the 4th and 13th divisions were intercepting them respectively†“We will assist the 4th division and attack the nearest enemy then move with them†“Copy that!†The team fled off towards their first rally point, on the side of the enemy, the 4th division was separated into two groups half of them were dealing the enemies and the other half was securing the safety of the civilians to their log-out way points, the Blackdust’s avatars were seriously attacking “Kill them! Do not let anyone leave this place alive†“But how about the hacking?!†“How can we hack if we were being halted?†“Then blast them away!†One of them fired a RPG and made a direct hit to the 4th Division that pinned down four of their members, the Blackdust’s avatars moved forward and attacked on the 4th Division “Team, secure the area at all cost!!†“Sir, all of the civilians were successfully logged-out†“AHHH!!†“Soldier down! Soldier Down!†“Grr… let’s finish this off!!" *-*-* --> |
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Well done K.M.R! Will read them when i have time, but unfortunately, i'm still going through the competition entries. Anyways, good work, keep it up! (I know you will!) EDIT: waiting for Basil's reply... (on the competition) will be back later! >< |
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*sings* Busy week, study reeks, almost went ov'er-the-edge! I haven't read any entry so far, which leaves me in a confused and vexed position. However, I would still be available for tomorrow's session, 06.00PM GMT - 09.00PM GMT, since I've no plans for tomorrow. I will be using MSN Live Messenger, and will carry the moniker "sharpenter27". I will have read the entries by then, I presume. |
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@ Karuzo: Gomen, I will have to comment on the story later. But sheesh, that teasers as long as some of the usual posts in this thread (that's a compliment) @ Basil: Okay, thank you! Em... is it alright just to put in the username? I was thinking that it needs a @email.com I wonder if Mokona did accept you to also be a judge. I think she may have missed you're offer in you're previous posts. (correct me if I'm wrong) @ All: Eh, lets try to keep things related to the IM meetings in the dev thread. Some of the project members may not be looking here. ^^' There's an announcement related to that in the dev thread. Whee~! Ugo's going to go straight back to her studyin at school on monday. Hurray for my 4 day summer~!!! Ugh... waiting on the results is aggravating!!! >.< |
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If I am correct, the meeting's at 01.00PM to 05.00PM GMT time, right? I'll do my best to attend the given time. And yeah, Mokona had sent me all entries. I've read them all earlier, and I'm torn between three entries. Also, I don't know if there's supposed to be an extension, as I only registered to Hotmail only today. If you DO need the whole ID, it's sharpenter27@live.ca Don't forget to drop in a note so I'll know your ID. |
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@ Basil Aye-aye. Well, I did that using .ca ending. If you get the invite then that means it worked. *starts to rock around in chair, waiting on results* |